The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Contemporary society is build based on a model of competition. In almost every career pathway the most competent and productive individual will be rewarded, while someone not working hard enough, who is not equipped with all relevant skills required to complete a task will lag behind and possibly will have to worry about losing his work position. This constant pressure to be superior than everyone else, which is the most important ingredient of a highly competitive society, prevails especially in the domain of leadership. However, the question that arises is: is this the best way to prepare young individuals for success in a leadership position? The answer to this question is no. Cooperation is a far more indispensable element of success in leadership.
First and foremost, competition is mutually exclusive with group work. A leader strongly oriented toward values related to competition is more likely to be authoritarian and working alone devolving tasks later to his/her subordinates. In contrast, a leader oriented toward more cooperative values is more likely to encourage subordinates to participate in the decision process. Some people might assert that a leader’s job is to coordinate a group of individuals by giving specific directions on how the work should be completed. Since this person is hired for having greater qualifications, he/she is the only one who can make decisions. However, an organization can substantially be benefited from a variety of ideas being brought to the table. If a diversity of voices can be heard with different backgrounds and experiences, the leader will have an extensive array of ideas, so that he/she can make the more well informed decision about the final plan. In the case of a competition-oriented leader, the final plan will be a product of the otherwise restrained experience of the leader herself.
Additionally, another advantage of cooperation is a more friendly and less stressful environment at work. Leadership in modern society has been equated with qualities, such as working well under pressure and hard work until exhaustion. Proponents of this view of a successful leader might suggest that competition is the only way to incentivize people to be as good as possible at their work. However, this idea deprives leadership from people that are highly creative, qualified, and intelligent, but do not work well under stress. For example, in academia, a leader in the field is the one who is capable of securing grant funding, an extremely competitive endeavor. However, exceptional scientists who excel in their fields and would be immensely helpful in the scientific community as leaders, do not have this opportunity, because they dislike competition. Competition can be an incentive, but can also be a cause of burnout that is linked to diminished creativity and originality of ideas that a true leader should possess.
In conclusion, although modern society has attributed excessively high value in competition as a recipe for leadership success, such a characteristic might deprive leaders from blossoming and contributing to the development of their field of work. Cooperation values, on the other hand, might increase the chances of productivity in the workplace and the success of the leader in his/her leadership position.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 388, Rule ID: SUPERIOR_THAN[1]
Message: The adjective superior is normally used with 'to'.
Suggestion: to
.... This constant pressure to be superior than everyone else, which is the most import...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2800.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35372848948 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18146969663 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 265.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506692160612 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 892.8 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6487536089 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.739130435 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7391304348 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0994065677697 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352464622575 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044328875927 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.076708643075 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0383537027723 0.0667264976115 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.38706741573 110% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 100.480337079 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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