’The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.’
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.”
Young people are instilled with a sense of competition right from their childhood, be it in academics or sports or extra curricular activities. This sense of competition is considered necessary to help them realise their potential. But, in order to prepare them for leadership roles in government, industry, or other fields, it is more important to instill in them a sense of cooperation.
In order to effectively function in a society and to contribute to it, it is imperative for all people to cooperate with one another. This quality should be stressed upon in the formative years of people while they are still young. When we talk of leadership positions, we have to evaluate the qualities which make a person a good leader in any sphere. There are several studies on what constitutes a good leader which conclusively prove that it has less to do with excellence of an individual, something which is gauged in competitions, and more about interpersonal skills. A good leader is one who inspires confidence amongst his team, thereby motivating them to work towards a common goal. A good leader practices what he preaches and leads by example. He is able to identify the strengths and weaknesses of his team, lauding the former and working upon the latter. These qualities of a good leader make it amply clear that the work expected from people commandeering any field relies heavily on cooperation heavy tactics.
In a competitive environment, a person is expected to be motivated by selfish reasons. The idea at work is to think more about "me" than "we". During school years, students are taught to immerse themselves in whatever field they want to excel in. They are required to concentrate on themselves by shutting out all other distractions. Everybody else is to be considered as an opponent when the time for competing comes, even if they are one's friends. On the other hand, an environment of cooperation is encouraged while working in teams, be it group sports or group assignments. Such an environment helps in bringing out the best of any group.
It can be said that instilling a sense of competition is necessary in young people in order to prepare them for the real world. But if we are specifically talking about preparing them for leadership roles in the future, a sense of cooperation will go a long way in preparing them better than a sense of competition. Leaders are supposed to work for some larger mission for which they have to inculcate skills necessary to motivate and work with people.
In conclusion, it cannot be denied that instilling a sense of competition is necessary in young people. At the same time, it is also true that inculcating a sense of cooperation is more desirable if we hope to prepare good and effective leaders of the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 457, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e for competing comes, even if they are ones friends. On the other hand, an environm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, in conclusion, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2334.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 473.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93446088795 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99482633863 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475687103594 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.698585714 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.47826087 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5652173913 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47826086957 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285346636865 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0772594725536 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764638105108 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166379004909 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805859196581 0.0667264976115 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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