The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

Essay topics:

The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The give issue states that to groom the youth of today for leadership roles should be via cooperation and not by competition. I do not fully agree to the issue as it is subjective in nature, though I lean towards cooperation, at a macro level.

First of all, the youth of today come from all diverse backgrounds-- educated and uneducated, rich and poor, from urban and rural areas. To groom them to potential leaders, this divide should first be bridged so that all of them start with the same platform. Cooperation between the youth is an important aspect of this. Each person should learn, unlearn and relearn from others. They should share their life, listen to other's lives and look at the leadership from other's point of view also. Moreover, in a fast paced world today, people from every nook and corner of the world. Hence, leader should be accomodative to all cultures, considerate to all his subordinates and be tolerant to people from all diverse backgrounds. Thus, a sense of cooperation is needed to be instilled before people become leaders,in the early stages of their career(upto 30 years), be it in any field.

Second, leadership position depends on the organisation-is it a government, or a coporate company or a hospital. Additionally, it also depends on the role the person will be taking- a CEO, a CFO, a CTO, a manager,etc. Depending on these two, the youth should be trained to be cooperative or competitive.The levels of cooperation and competition are also dictated by the types of companies and the roles the person heads. For example, a CEO at an investment bank needs to be competitive to close a deal but also be cooperative to maintain relations with other leaders and clients in the future. The tradeoff between cooperation and competition is also subjective to the given scenario. The CEO ot the manager of a company need to be competitive when competing against lot of companies for a billion dollar contract for his company. On the other hand, the same leader has to be more cooperative with other leades in tackling cyber crimes, fraud, etc which involve sharing of resources, personal and others. Hence, the potential leaders have to groomed to adapt to various levels of coopertion and competition.

Third, a cooperative sense is also good for the society at large. Elon Musk, founder of SpaceX and Hyperloop shunned competitiveness and is working for the good of the society. His hyperloop, aims to make high speed transport accessible to all the economical seactions of the societ across the world. He also setup a electic power plant in Australia, to provide power to a lot of people. Bill Gates is a also philanthropist, a leader and doing good for humanity.

In a nutshell, I would say that leaders should be groomed to be cooperative at a macro level at the early stages, but at individual levels, it is subjective to the role, the organisation and the scnario the leader is facing. Hence, potential leaders should be groomed to adapt to different scenarios.

Votes
Average: 8.5 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 487, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...he leadership from others point of view also. Moreover, in a fast paced world today,...
^^^^
Line 4, column 809, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...e instilled before people become leaders,in the early stages of their careerupto 30...
^^^
Line 6, column 213, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , etc
...e taking- a CEO, a CFO, a CTO, a manager,etc. Depending on these two, the youth shou...
^^^^
Line 6, column 304, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...rained to be cooperative or competitive.The levels of cooperation and competition a...
^^^
Line 8, column 316, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... societ across the world. He also setup a electic power plant in Australia, to pr...
^
Line 8, column 371, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... plant in Australia, to provide power to a lot of people. Bill Gates is a also ph...
^^
Line 8, column 404, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ower to a lot of people. Bill Gates is a also philanthropist, a leader and doing...
^
Line 8, column 404, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('also') instead an adjective, or a noun ('philanthropist') instead of another adjective.
...ower to a lot of people. Bill Gates is a also philanthropist, a leader and doing good for humanity. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, moreover, second, so, still, third, thus, as to, for example, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2502.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89628180039 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92607383381 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487279843444 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 16.0 4.99550561798 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.009218036 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.08 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.44 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.83258426966 290% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113981718933 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369784835588 0.0831039109588 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0374381759581 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.067886911231 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0362005667795 0.0667264976115 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 100.480337079 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.