Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take.
In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and
explain how these examples shape your position.
The issue gives states that the young people of today should be encouraged to pursue long term realistic goals rather that seeking immediate and instant fame. This is one of the main problems that plagues youngsters of the present. Indisputably, getting instant success does encourages the young to do more and strive to do something
better than what they have achieved. Yet, it has its own dark sides. Instant fame without experience does more harm than good while a steady and gradual rise in their pursuit of long term and realistic goals is always beneficial to the society at large. Hence, I agree with the given issue.
First, instant fame will be without experience may be encouraging in short term, but it harms a larger set of people in the long run. To prove this, take the example of Flipkart, an Indian e-commerce website similar to Amazon founded by two youngsters. It was an instant hit among the Indian population and enjoyed tremendous success
during its initial years. Great discounts for the customers, hefty compensation for the employees made it the undisputed leader in the industry. But, with the progress of time, the losses started mounting and employees started resigning due to lesser pay and customer satisfaction plumented as people found bricks and other irrelevant stuff
in place of the items they had ordered and calls to the customer support went unanswered. Hence, instant success did more harm than good not only to the founders and employees, but also the customers who bought the products from it. Thus, instant fame and recognition is not good.
Additionally, pursuing long term goals with a steady rise is good. To illustrate this, I want to tell about one of my classmates in school. He was a average boy, but always set realistic goals within a realistic timeline and always worked towards his goals diligently. He went to Harvard for his undergrad and is now pursuing a Ph.D from MIT. Another example to support would be the company Infosys, which was started 40 years ago and it is now the best IT company in India and employs close to 2 million people in India, benefiting the society at large by creating job opportunities for many in a job starved company like India. The founders, in their autobiographies, reveal that they chose to rise up steadily and set up realistic and achievable goals rather than chasing instant success. Thus, going after long term realistic is better not only to the individual, but also to the society at large.
But, instant success can definitely encourage the people involved to strive for more, it has its own set of negatives that outweigh its positives.If the people cannot deal with the instant success, and aren't mature enough to handle the newfound fame, they will not succeed.
In conclusion, I would like to say that even though there are cases where instant success have had positive implications , they constitute a very small amount. Hence going after long term and realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition is beneficial to both the individuals involved and the society at large.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, thus, while, in conclusion, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 521.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96353166987 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61367841675 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502879078695 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3825393126 60.3974514979 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.434782609 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.652173913 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21739130435 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258710719173 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759667417824 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0854871633732 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119339758062 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665321987088 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.