The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The issue of whether or not the society must prepare its younger generation for leadership in government, industry or other fields by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition is a contentious one. Indisputably, cooperation is an essential trait of a good leader in any field. Nevertheless, the benefits of being competitive outweigh the benefits of being cooperative because the nature of the world requires one to be competitive to be successful in any field. Thus, the society must prepare its younger generation for a competitive world.
First of all, I would like to point out that competition is essential for healthy progress in any field. To illustrate, when I was in school, only two or three students were competitive in getting a good score in the exams. However, one of our teachers announced a prize for the top 10 best performance. Everybody became very enthusiastic and started preparing well and the average performance of our class grew from 60 percent to 80 percent. Consequently, it is obvious that competition is essential for healthy progress in any field.
Additionally, competition is omnipresent and all the individuals must be trained to handle it in life. If an individual is raised without instilling the sense of competition, then he/she might never be able to become a leader. For instance, there was a girl in my neighborhood who did not have competitive skills but nominated herself for the post of colony president. Due to her lack of competitive skills, she lost the election to a competitive opponent. Based on both common senses and practical thinking, it is essential to be competitive to be a good leader in any field.
Admittedly, cooperation is required among individuals in certain situations, especially in taking a united decision for the society. However, lack of competitive skills is not gonna solve the issue because, for strong ideas to be generated, competition is the foundation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue of whether or not the society must prepare its younger ge...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, well, as to, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1637.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 318.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14779874214 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21608956211 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.537735849057 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9441618358 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.3125 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169768295128 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683318871394 0.0831039109588 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776410329722 0.0758088955206 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109833900296 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509777400973 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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