The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The topic raises an issue of whether young people should be taught sense of competition to become a good leader in politics, industry, or any other field. Cooperation and competition are two most important qualities one should have to thrive in any field. Cooperation should be taught to young people to become a good leader but competition is also important.
First of all, to become a leader in any field, you have to be on top. In this generation, there are many magnates in a particular field who try to get to top. This is possible only if they have sense of competition which motivates them to become better than their competition. Sense of competition also does not leaves any room for complacency. For instance, there were many social networking websites like Myspace and Orkut. But, as soon as Facebook was introduced, the shares of these websites started declining. This was because of the sense of competition in the leadership of Facebook and as well as sense of cooperation in them to keep their employee happy.
Furthermore, sense of competition and cooperation goes hand by hand. To be the best in a particular field, one should have a quality of competition. But, to be a great leader one should also know how to keep their employee happy. This is where quality of cooperation plays a vital role. Let's take an example of political parties. To get elected, political parties promote themselves among people by promising them various perks after they get elected. This promises are done because of the sense of competition they have to win. Just imagine, can a political party thrive if it does not promote its values? The answer is no. So, yes, it is important to have a sense of competition while trying to be the best. Cooperation plays the role after a particular party wins. They should know how to deal and address the problems of common people and try to resolve them. This is possible if the leader is cooperative. So, it is pretty obvious from above points that to become a good leader, both, cooperation and competition are important.
Finally, sometimes competition can also have some negative effects. Some leaders in of the industry, try to use wrong activities to be on top of their field. For instance, there was an IPL cricket scam two years ago where, to win the tournament, "Chennai Super King" a team in IPL tried to bribe one of the other teams. They were eventually caught and banned for two years. So, my point is, yes, there are some cases where competition can lead to malpractice. But, that does not negate the fact that to be a good leader it is important to have both the qualities.
So from the above points, it is clear that sense of competition is as important as sense of cooperation to thrive as a leader in any field.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'leave'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: leave
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Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'leave'
Suggestion: leave
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...lity of cooperation plays a vital role. Lets take an example of political parties. T...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'win'?
Suggestion: win
...plays the role after a particular party wins. They should know how to deal and addre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, so, well, while, for instance, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73456790123 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73663557039 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415637860082 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 740.7 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7817257522 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.2258064516 118.986275619 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6774193548 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.1935483871 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.2758426966 224% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149471522678 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.040863803576 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391962201252 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0939181032788 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386103813919 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.38706741573 79% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 100.480337079 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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