The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
A sense of cooperation among people in our society surely gives us good outcomes. I agree that the sense of cooperation is an important factor for our young people to be leaders of tomorrow. But we can not neglect the role of competition in making us better. So i agree with the claim, on the part of sense of cooperations aspect, but competition has its own role to play in making leaders in any field.
Starting with the benefits a sense of cooperation among out young population. When we have the feeling of sense of cooperation with others then we are open to ideas by other people. We are open to the discussions and debates to find ways to tackle any problem or making some important decisions. People agree or disagree, but they do not pull each other back. The quality of listening to others is highly appreciated for a leader, and qualities like this make him/her a better leader than others. Other than that when there is sense of cooperation in the society than people do not indulge in corruption to get to the top.
Competition on the other hand has its own role to play. A healthy competition is always welcomed, which only makes us better. There are numerous examples we can see in today's world where competition is actually contributing for growth of individuals and organizations. In this context, we can take common example of Messi and Ronaldo. Both are the best in their businees- that is playing football- and they are constantly making each other better. For Organizations we can take examples of technology giants like Apple and Samsung, which are consistently coming up with innovative products because of their competition.
In conclusion, we can say that a sense of cooperation is important for our young people to be leaders of tomorrow. But we can not deny the role of competition, which will help them grow.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cooperation among out young population. When we have the feeling of sense of coopera...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, so, then, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1526.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 320.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76875 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8000488277 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0233736901 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.7777777778 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.21951772744 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218334276111 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755668834885 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408142027765 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147395924786 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189366157891 0.0667264976115 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.