The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
In order to define the term "Leadership", one must consider various possibilities it has to offer. The leader of any organisation should possess superior man-management skills and unreal prowess of judgement. The leaders are responsible for the growth of the company and the betterment of the persons associated with the same organization. To make good leaders out of the youth, the youngsters need to be intimate with the sense of co-operation as well as competition. If "all or nothing" approach is taken to develops the young generation by instilling only cooperation, not the competitive edge, then those leaders will likely to face crisis in future. The topic has taken the dubious "all or nothing" approach, which I beg to differ.
First of all, leadership skills need cooperation as well as competition. "All or nothing" approach to train young leaders will do more harm than good. To be a good leader, the person has to have the competitive edge which drives him to the top among others and also need to possess a sense of cooperation, which will make him willing to listen what others have to offer to the table. To illustrate this with an example, a reputed CEO of a certain company will have the necessary vision and prowess to give a competitive edge from the other companies of more or less same calibre. But, in order to have the company growing in terms of technological advancements or marketing strategies, the CEO will listen to the teams he has in his command, what they are suggesting for the improvement of their company.
Furthermore, any acumen leader will tend to make judicious use of the force he have under his command. If the so called leader is stubborn and full of competititive drive, he will tend to force his decisions final, irrespective of the decisions long lasting credibility. Also, if the leader is too much dependent on the capability and decision making of others, the leadership of the leader will eventually come under questioning.
To sum it all up, Industry and Government leaders need to have superior judgement and man-management skills, which comes both from cooperation as well as competition. If the youth has to be trained to be the next generation leaders, "all or nothing" approach will not be enough to produce quality leaders. The institutions, who are producing leaders, need to make sure that the young minds should have equilibrated sense of co-operation and competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 531, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'develop'.
Suggestion: develop
...l or nothing' approach is taken to develops the young generation by instilling only...
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Line 1, column 665, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...hose leaders will likely to face crisis in future. The topic has taken the dubious '...
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Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...d to make judicious use of the force he have under his command. If the so called lea...
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Line 7, column 144, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...ills, which comes both from cooperation as well as competition. If the youth has to be tra...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, then, well, as to, as well as, first of all, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12039312039 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20931926619 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484029484029 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3868195097 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.588235294 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100053401743 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0374946312444 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031876925639 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0634539452259 0.150359130593 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341951246859 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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