The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
The author claims in the newspaper editorial that the autonomy of the country depends on how strong the security at the border of the country is. However, the argument fails to mention several key explanations on the basis of which it could have been evaluated. To support the statement, the journalist claimed that the number of immigrants should be checked in order to prosper in national identity and economic benefits of the country. After carefully scrutinizing, the evidence has provided little or no support towards authors recommendations.
First of all, the argument assumes that every immigrant is a threat in terms of the safety and security of the native. This statement has absolutely no correlation with the claim that the author made. For example, the immigrants might be coming for a job or a facility that is not available in their home country, or the immigrant is coming because the person is the specialist in the discipline he/ she works. Therefore, it can't be blandly assumed that every immigrant poses a threat to the country's security and prosperity.
Again, the argument claims that the autonomy of the country is dependent on the strength of its borders. But the author didn't mention anything to support the statement except his or her view on checking immigration policy. The strength of the boundary doesn't necessarily lie on the number of immigrants they are allowing. The true strength of any country's border depends upon many aspects. As an example, how strong their current defence policy is, how strong their military power is and how diligent their armed forces etc is really important for a country's strength at its border, therefore supporting its autonomy. The support of the argument is not logical and fails to answer several key queries. If the author has answered the questions rather than arguing about immigrant policy, the logic might have a ground to be believed.
Finally, the author cites that the autonomy of the country is dependent on how many immigrants they are allowing from their borders. There might be cases of mishappening in the past by some of the immigrants, but the autonomy is not at all correlated with the number of immigrants they are allowing from their boundaries. Without convincing citation from the past events, the conclusion is far from complete and logical.
To sum it up, the author had made several unwarranted assumptions while claiming the argument on the nation's strength at the borders. The argument has raised several sceptical questions on why immigrants numbers should be checked and how the strength of the nation's border can be defined, which the author left unanswered. Finally, to sound the argument better, the journalist should have mentioned some valid statistics against the current immigration policy to support why the number of the immigrants should be checked etc.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 471 350
No. of Characters: 2352 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.659 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.994 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.678 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.651 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.531 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...discipline he/ she works. Therefore, it cant be blandly assumed that every immigrant...
^^^^
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...discipline he/ she works. Therefore, it cant be blandly assumed that every immigrant...
^^^^
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...strength of its borders. But the author didnt mention anything to support the stateme...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...on policy. The strength of the boundary doesnt necessarily lie on the number of immigr...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...be cases of mishappening in the past by some of the immigrants, but the autonomy is not at ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 102, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ions while claiming the argument on the nations strength at the borders. The argument h...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, really, so, therefore, while, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12579957356 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73312452633 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44776119403 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 736.2 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7176072604 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.476190476 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2380952381 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271921656419 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0906266974573 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.069625425539 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157220914479 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443601788161 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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