The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competetion

"No man is an island", John Donne once said and this metophor can be used and applied to a society as well. Leaders learn from the young impressionable age and society should advocate a sense of cooperation, this in itself is a sort of teamwork where by the society comes together to develop their young people.

For young people, whom are at their prime age where they are the most influenced at that age. A sense of coorperation is a basic requirement. From young, children are placed together in schools and from such an early age, the fundamentals of teamwork and working together develop. This further builds through the school life, where students are required to work in groups for certain projects. Even extra curricular activities such as sports, example football, where by teammates need to work together to achieve a set common goal. Like every football team, there will be a captain, who requires a great sense of teamawork to be able to lead his team to victory.

The basis of teamwork and cooperation stems good team players in the work force, where teams thrive on good communication between peers, support between co-workers and generally a good culture developed for open communication and trust. This such environment can only further enhance any industry's business. Leaving space and oppourtunity for leaders to take the business to the next level, relying on the the advantages of having a good team and plenty of cooperation.

Of course, having competition is unavoidable and a certain amount of healthy competition can be beneficial in the right situations. To elaborate, team players challenging each other to perform better in a sales team would ultimately cultivate a ambience to push each others limits and go out of the comfort zone. This sometimes is necessary to excel and really identify and harness one's true capabilities as a leader. Of course, young people may be strayed to unhealthy competition which leads to a unwanted and sometimes immoral behaviour. Especially when winning the competition leads to attaining some sort of reward or prize, young people are very influenced to push through all barriers, sometimes even unethical ones, to achieve what they want. This sort of complex does not lead to the right preparation for leadership especially for the young people at a naive age.

To sum it all up, healthy competition could be necessary for growth and development however the right balance of healthy competition and cooperation should be established. With more cooperation, the key benefits and advantages are clear and consistent with what is required for leadership in the various government or industries.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, really, so, well, of course, sort of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2242.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15402298851 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89251132178 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526436781609 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.126226909 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8947368421 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31578947368 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196278913491 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592120149579 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568092537835 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104717372437 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218893142417 0.0628817314937 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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