The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Youths are the most crucial element of a country as they design the future of a country. It is the youth for which a nation can be more developed and progressed as they invent new ideas and they industrialize novel<span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="and "></span> ideas. Hence, the importance of youths is inevitably the most for the development of a country. I agree with the claim that the youths should be cooperative rather than being competitive to each other in order to lead in various aspects of their lives.
Firstly, co-operation means to assist or help each other in the time of sorrow or difficulties. The young generation of one country must be taught to be cooperative rather than teaching them to be competitive because co-operation creates a convivial environment which is essential for the growth of a leader. A leader must be helpful and co-operative otherwise people who work under a leader feel intimidated which negatively affect the productivity of the employees. For example, In Japan most of the leaders are compassionate and they have certain decorums which they always follow and the result of these are the inexorable success of Japan in automobile, electronics industry.

Secondly, co-operation creates a healthy environment which is necessary for the growth. On the other hand, competition induces animosity among each other and it results into hostility. Destructive debates, wars are the by-product of competitive mentality. For instance, in the world wars we have seen that the competition brought about indescribable sorrows, sufferings and destructions. Competition can never bring a healthy state for further progress.For this reason, the co-operation must be instilled in the minds of young people of a country because it will end up creating an amiable situation for them to be successful as leaders.

Moreover, being competitive is also prohibited in most of the religions of the world. The spiritual level of man cannot be achieved with a competitive nature. Furthermore, the religions explicitly mentioned about being cooperative.
On the contrary, some might refute my points suggesting that, healthy competition is good to prosper. Healthy competition makes one to strive for the better options which is the first condition to grow rapidly. A leader must always try to do better in their arena and competitive thinking can bring the development of one's country. For example, the students, if not competitive might become reluctant to do better in their examinations. They might become insipid and indifferent to hound for the betterment of their lives.

To conclude, a leader is a motivator and an idol of inspiration to the employees. He must be empathetic, compassionate, benevolent and also a philanthropist. But if the potential leaders are taught to do competiton from their early stage of life, then the presence of the previously mentioned virtues and positive aspects will be wanting. Hence, the young population of a country must be encouraged to be co-operative.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, for example, for instance, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2571.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36743215031 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.44694174895 2.79657885939 123% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484342379958 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 805.5 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5381644997 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.84 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.16 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142010932705 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421533435113 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043858019122 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0749310642615 0.150359130593 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593315916762 0.0667264976115 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3 Out of 6
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