The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The statement provides a topic where the opinion among people differ about, whether the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership is by instelling a sense of cooperation and not competition in them. It may be said that both qualities are important and I argue that the best way to prepare young people for leadership is by instilling a sense of cooperation in them.
First, although it is important in all fields of leadership that there is some kind of cooperation, because of the dissemination of knowledge, I think a sense of competition will get leaders further and more successful. Competition brings out the best in people, it motivates them to work harder and achieve their goals. Take for example leadership in industry, the one who works the harderst, has the most chance to get the better job or the higher function, because of his dedicated work. When employees would only coorperate, there would not be any motivation to achieve the highest goal and get the best job.
Furthermore, competition is not a bad thing. It let's people grow to be the better version of themselves. Leaders in government have to compete to get chosen by the elections. When they would only coorporate with other leaders for other parties, inhabitants of a country would not know where to vote for, because the leaderships would not have any clear salient standing points. When the elections are over, in some cases it is important that parties coorperate to get the best wellfare for the country, but without competition, political leaders will get nowhere and something like democracy would be useless, because no party would be clear in its promises.
On the contrary, people may say that due competition people can feel very stressed. it puts a lot of weight on their shoulders, because they think they have to achieve the best results. To a certain level, this is true, but if one can not deal with this kind of pressure, it would not be a fantastic leader anyway, because with leadership there comes a lot of stress and one really should have to deal with it to excell further in their job.
In conclusion, a good sense of coorperation is not unimportant, but a sense of competition in leadership is one of the qualities a leader should absolutely have to achieve the top. It brings motivation and clear standingpoints from the leader. Competition may cause some stress, but when people can't stand this stress, they should not be a leader.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...petition people can feel very stressed. it puts a lot of weight on their shoulders...
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Line 9, column 296, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... may cause some stress, but when people cant stand this stress, they should not be a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
anyway, but, first, furthermore, if, may, really, so, still, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in some cases, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83451536643 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78484388722 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442080378251 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.7737699194 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.294117647 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8823529412 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.21951772744 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208277749917 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721638564469 0.0831039109588 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896279463624 0.0758088955206 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134288129501 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119384761998 0.0667264976115 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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