The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Every person has a different talent. The great leader evaluates each member's strength and put them together to meet a common goal. Similarly, the United States Government has three branches, and with the cooperation of those branches they meet one goal, making America just. Sense of coöperation, however, is not something that can be achieved in one day. In order to make cooperative society, we must instill the value of cooperation from the child.
The Twenty first technology is summarized as the fusion of knowledges. Many people find difficulties when they keep abreast with the technology. For example, a 3D printing technology is combination of chemistry, computer science and physics. It is impossible for a single person to have knowledge of every details of the 3D printing. So, many todays project is worked by multiple branches of scientists together and they give valuable insight to others.
People find the importance of cooperation not only in technology, but also in sports. By looking at the World cup, a most famous soccer contest, the winner is not the team who have a greatest player. The cooperation of the team's director and players overwhelm other greater teams. One who doesn't have a value of cooperation cannot be compared with the well-organized team.
In these days, there are many standardized tests, high school varsity contests, and other contests. They are beneficial to young because they motivate the young. Therefore, acknowledging the technological trends and the benefit of competition, people should teach the sense of cooperation within the competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 70, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'members'' or 'member's'?
Suggestion: members'; member's
...talent. The great leader evaluates each members strength and put them together to meet ...
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Line 3, column 5, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: Twenty-first
...e of cooperation from the child. The Twenty first technology is summarized as the fusion ...
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Line 5, column 182, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...st, the winner is not the team who have a greatest player. The cooperation of the...
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Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teams'' or 'team's'?
Suggestion: teams'; team's
...greatest player. The cooperation of the teams director and players overwhelm other gr...
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Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... overwhelm other greater teams. One who doesnt have a value of cooperation cannot be c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, similarly, so, still, therefore, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 33.0505617978 33% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1352.0 2235.4752809 60% => OK
No of words: 254.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32283464567 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95490735269 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625984251969 0.4932671777 127% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0684126232 60.3974514979 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.5294117647 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9411764706 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124546207301 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0357303252154 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357021966939 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727421397508 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0437645756947 0.0667264976115 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.98 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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