The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
At the first glance statement gives more positive vibes which will attract us to collude with the idea. Instilling cooperation in young people will be an initiative for moulding them to be a leader in respective fields. But that is not the only criteria which will lead them to become leaders. People should be addendumed with many other qualities, such as acceptance, competition skills etc., which in turn helps them to become leaders.
For example, as per statement let's consider we ingest the sense of cooperation in young people without competition. Now he/ she is working as a leader in a software company. For sure, he/ she will be able to support, understand the teams situation under their leadership and provide them required help or suggestion whenever required. Is this all we needed from a leader? Absolotely not, apart from supporting and understanding people under them which is also a crucial one, they need to incorperate new ideas, suggest different ways and think out of box to sustain in such a competitive world. Now, without preparing or instiling any competitive spirit in them, they will not have any sense of competition spirit which will in turn push him/ her back in her role.
However, without any competitive spirit it is obvious that no new ideas will be incorperated in any field. This will decline the growth in any field. Therefore leadership quality would be at stance. Some state that competitive spirit will make the leader more mechanical and they will not focus on people under them. Neverthless, this can be eradicating by instiling proper sense of competitive spirit and cooperation in young people. Also, its important to teach them how to balance both these qualities in any demanding situation. Having competitative spirit will arouse the person to think out of box and fetch more profit.
Finally, though statement as a positive intention towards ingesting cooperation sense in young people which will help them as leaders in any field. It will make more sense when corrected by stating apart from cooperation instiling competitive spirit is also important for young people which will lead them into leaders and in turn a better and developed society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teams'' or 'team's'?
Suggestion: teams'; team's
...will be able to support, understand the teams situation under their leadership and pr...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s will decline the growth in any field. Therefore leadership quality would be at stance. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, apart from, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 363.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07438016529 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73351818495 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501377410468 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.4119746337 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9473684211 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1052631579 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207990172003 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747295554387 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054341035112 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157081371054 0.150359130593 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491101378187 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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