The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Nowadays, as more young people being offered leadership in government, industry and other fields, there has been a heated discussion about what is the best way to prepare young people for leadership. Some may argue that there's no way better than putting them in a cooperative environment. Though a friendly environment can benefit the young, I think some competition is also needed to help them.
To begin with, in most circumstances, cooperation leads to success. Because cooperation is of vital importance in our society, we need to train the young people on how to cooperate with others. Take the industry field for example. Apple is famous for its electrical products, such as iPhone, iPad... To manufacture such a product, we need lots of companies to cooperate well. To be more specific, iPad is designed in the headquarter of Apple in America. Then, after the prototype is contrived, the paradigm is sent to different company all over the world. The CPU is manufactured in Korean. The touch screen is made in Europe. And the assembling process is completed in China. And it is many companies cooperating together that such a product can be made and gain a high reputation in the world. Young people needs to learn how to cooperate, and they will definitely face more challenges which cannot be solved only by themselves.
Competition is also needed on their way to success because competition can bring innovation and stimulate them to do better in their work. If a company has competitors, then it needs to make their product better than the competitors in order to win the preference of customer. In order to achieve this, they might need to come up with more innovative ideas about the design of their product and make efforts to increase the quality of their products. As a result, the social welfare is maximized because the companies are putting efforts in their product instead of their deceptive slogans which aim at attracting customers. Moreover, in modern society, every field has competition. It is really hard to find some work in which there's no competitors.
Some may argues that young people only needs to be prepared for competition. I strongly oppose this idea. If you put the young people in an environment where there's only competition, those green hands will easily lose their confidence because they are lacking competition experience and can be easily defeated by others.
To summarize, the society needs to instill their young people in a sense of both cooperation and competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
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Suggestion: there's
...ple for leadership. Some may argue that theres no way better than putting them in a co...
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...o be more specific, iPad is designed in the headquarter of Apple in America. Then, after the pr...
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Suggestion: there's
... really hard to find some work in which theres no competitors. Some may argues that...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...he young people in an environment where theres only competition, those green hands wil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, well, for example, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 419.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02625298329 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83977054358 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515513126492 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.3294301546 60.3974514979 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.24 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.76 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218666276013 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574733770582 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745623987334 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145957105848 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0682425356897 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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