"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position
Looking back the history of the way in which a society prepares its leaders ,a myriad number of ways has been observed and each of it has it's own strength and weakness , In comparison to all the methods , the method of insisting the upcoming leaders a sense of co-operation has pros that are outweighed by its weakness , whereas the other methods has the weakness atop of their strengths , thus in my opinion I strongly accept the claim that " The best way to prepare a leader is to instill them a sense of coöperation than competition , for the following reasons.
To begin with , The most important quality of a leader is to promote unity in his group or a society for its longer survival , however if a sense of competition is instilled in them , then they always strive to retain their position of leadership and may even begrudge with some of his contemporaries leading to the dissolution of the group in the worst , one such example is the reign of the Rajput rulers , during the period of attack of Muhammed of Ghazni , A muslim ruler in the 12th century AD , If the rulers of the two Rajput kingdoms might have cooperated with each other then they would have won him and might have retained their kingdom , however because of their will to show their superiority in the sense of competition they lost their kingdom , this event acts as a perfect example of the need of the sense of co-operation in the leaders in the field of politics .
Further more , in the field of industry and corporate , the successful leaders are those who have practiced the art of cooperation than competition , this even lead their corporations to pinnacle in a shorter interval of time , that their success in not an ephemeral or transitory one , indeed a long lasting one , One such example is the growth of the famous computer industry , Microsoft , A software company , the company has grown leaps and bounds because of its leader Bill Gates , Who always sought to co-operate with each other in the same field , keeping aside the competition he indeed had a mutual understanding with the other corporation that helped him get a diverse ideas that promoted his company's growth , This example proves the need of the sense of co-operation in the field of industry where it helps the leader to be abreast of the new methodologies , that vouched the other aspect of leadership that is the progress of his society.
In conclusion , the qualities of the leadership are often enhanced by the practice of co-operation than competition , where the latter may lead to downfall of the leader
for the mentioned reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, may, so, still, then, thus, whereas, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80493273543 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73102375479 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461883408072 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.2370786517 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 111.0 23.0359550562 482% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 297.569319655 60.3974514979 493% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 535.75 118.986275619 450% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 111.5 23.4991977007 474% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.75 5.21951772744 474% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 7.80617977528 436% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149023088285 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0976660709192 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547508240841 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0914566469748 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570877085239 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 56.9 14.1392134831 402% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -32.73 48.8420337079 -67% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.92365168539 201% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 45.4 12.1743820225 373% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.74 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.43 8.38706741573 148% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 11.8971910112 462% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 46.4 11.2143820225 414% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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