The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim.
People often criticize the hyper-competitive culture pervasive in our society today. From single-digit university admission rates to the handful of ventures out of dozens able to secure startup funding--we are competing for resources, attention, money, and more. Our focus on becoming the best in any field often obscure many other factors we need to consider when we are leaders of different fields. A certain dose of competition may be necessary and motivating to some; however, in order to prepare young people for leadership roles, we need to additionally instill in them a sense of cooperation critical for long-term prosperity in many fields.
No person grows up and lives in a vacuum, and society can play many different roles in teaching and educating young people. Schools and other educational institutions import theoretical and practical knowledge; governments and community organizations influence public policy and welfare; and parents and/or other relatives help provide financial, personal, and well-rounded upbringing. To assume that each component of society can and should impart the same lessons on someone is naive. In order to sustain a well-functioning society, governments may introduce programs that are more cooperative in nature while schools may emphasize both cooperation and competition in order to find the best talent.
In addition to the heterogeneous influences from society on an individual, each field that a young person aspires to lead in can have different requirements of leadership too. An individual who wants to become a pioneer in a technological field may require to have more competitive traits than one who wants to motivate a community for a social justice movement. Different issues may also require different solutions--a policy advisor overseeing a land dispute need cooperative skills much more than a founder of a startup looking to break into an unfamiliar industry.
It can be argued that competition is essential in many of the breakthroughs that our past and present leaders have made. Healthy competition often brings out the best in some, and people often find satisfaction and motivation in beating their peers. However, an extreme focus on adversarial relationships between actors is often not conducive to reaching mutually beneficial or sustainable solutions. In addition, competition is often stereotyped as a traditionally masculine and male-desired trait, exacerbating gender and opportunity inequality. Many of the great leaders that we have seen in different fields, such as Martin Luther King Jr. and Marie Curie, have credited their success to the extensive collaboration and persistence of people within their respective movements of racial equality and scientific breakthrough.
Depending on the individual and the field of leadership they intend to pursue, the balance of competition and cooperation may slightly differ. However, it is certain that both traits are essential in order to allow their leadership to have a sustaining and great impact. As a society, we need to also value and encourage collaboration as we have with competition, and to teach young people that both are required to becoming effective leaders.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, while, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2716.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53156822811 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19009078357 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513238289206 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 871.2 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7296980138 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.947368421 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8421052632 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136715323382 0.243740707755 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043249438063 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0431601223349 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802088445983 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492884441324 0.0667264976115 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 48.8420337079 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.38706741573 116% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 100.480337079 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.