"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Young generation of a nation are the backbone and future of that nation. Future leaders will rise from them and to facilitate this, young generations is nurtured to leadership by various programs taken up by governments of a nation. In this statement it is posited that to make the young generation prepared for the leadership in various sectors, it is more preferable to instill a sense of cooperations instead of competition. As a social race and considering the gravity of leadership, sense of cooperation is the best policy over the sense of competition to nuture the young future leadership.
Human society functions based on cooperation. We are dependant on each other in almost every aspect. To maintain a society, thus cooperation plays a very impotant role. But every society and nations and organizations have their leaders and the attitude and characteristics of the leader actually have a very important influence on the behavior of the society, nation and organization. As young generation are our future leaders, if we can mould them in a leader who is compassionate, has the feel for cooperation then he can work better for the nation. It is not uncommon in current world to see a venal leader, who only thinks about ownself rather than the welfare of the nation. For example the leader of Lybia, Gaddafi was collecting wealth while lybia suffered.
Furthermore, many leadership qualities are abstract. We have seen leaders who are verbose, some who are laconic and they also differ in putting importance on diferent policies. But, If they can be nurtured from the young age with the sense of cooperation they rather than competiton, this will help them in future. Because, in future they will face each other in different sectors. If competiton becomes the main focus of a leader, it has the potential to harm the whole nation. In current world, we have seen many famous young leaders like, Canadian Prime minister, Justin, New Zealand Prime minister Arden, Us Congress Woman Alexandar Ocasio, who are hailed for their compassion and sense of duty toward the society they serve.
Although, some people might argue that a leader has to be competitive to make the sector go forward toward progress. Like a presindential election where many person competes but only one person is selected. However if that president doesnot get cooperation from others it becomes tough for him to lead the nation. Thus it is important for others to have the sense of cooperation to succeed as a whole. Competiton may exist, but the sense of cooperation should be more prominent.
Young age is best time to mould a person for the future and while developing a young person for the leadership, it is a better way to inspire them to be more cooperative instead of being hard and fast competitive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... social race and considering the gravity of leadership, sense of cooperation is t...
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Suggestion: dependent
... functions based on cooperation. We are dependant on each other in almost every aspect. T...
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Suggestion:
...has the feel for cooperation then he can work better for the nation. It is not un...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...er than competiton, this will help them in future. Because, in future they will face each...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...petiton, this will help them in future. Because, in future they will face each other in...
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Line 5, column 409, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...rent sectors. If competiton becomes the main focus of a leader, it has the potential to ha...
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...duty toward the society they serve. Although, some people might argue that a leader ...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: 'many people', 'many persons'.
Suggestion: many people; many persons
...ss. Like a presindential election where many person competes but only one person is selecte...
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Suggestion: However,
...mpetes but only one person is selected. However if that president doesnot get cooperati...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...comes tough for him to lead the nation. Thus it is important for others to have the ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
... should be more prominent. Young age is best time to mould a person for the future a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, while, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 469.0 442.535393258 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97441364606 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82704286127 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473347547974 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2279625493 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.434782609 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3913043478 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.34782608696 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17898642242 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558861292769 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520252409656 0.0758088955206 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117377345798 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397917074622 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.