The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
A leader has to work with a lot of people. Not only he has to work for them but also maintain harmony between all of them and make sure the team works smoothly. Thus instilling a sense of cooperation at young age would not only help the work in working together in a team but also to lead a team together forward.
For instance take a tech lead in a technical team of some IT industry. Now if the tech lead is competitive with his peers, he would always want to move ahead of his team members. Doing so there will be no bonding in the team and each member will be working alone. Not only would this bring chaos but also will bring in other factors like blaming each other, inequality and no ownership. And working in such a team would not bring the moral up of the members and thus would ultimately impact the performance of the team. On the other hand if the tech lead has mastered the skills of cooperation and is able to make the team work with each other, not only will this set a good example for the team members but also inculcate a sense of happiness thus ultimately bringing up the moral of the team. They individually one plus one makes two but eleven if they work together.
That does not mean a leader should not be competitive. Yes of course they should indeed be competitive but as a team. Consider a CEO of a big company. If he is not competitive with other companies in the same field, his company would never move forward in terms of innovation. Being competitive brings in the urge to strive yourself towards betterness. And if the CEO has that competitive zeal within him, he will always strive to make his company the best by staying on top of products that they provide. A good example of this is twitter. Twitter recently revamped their whole website. They realised that their developers were not able to add a simple edit button, while Facebook is off onto working on artificial intelligence on faces. This competitive nature forced them to take a decision which involved billions of dollars but ultimately will enable them to stay abreast with other companies. Now with the totally new tech stack they can freely do new things they can and who knows provide a whole new experience to their customers. And of course this would not have been possible without the cooperation of people within twitter.
So yes, in conclusion it is important to be competitive but when it comes to working together or being a representative (leader) of a team working together cooperation plays a very important role in maintaing the harmony and creating successful teams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 801, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...bringing up the moral of the team. They individually one plus one makes two but eleven if they w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, thus, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5788336933 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55329946355 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.444924406048 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3152626731 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1739130435 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1304347826 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47826086957 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.095850694885 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0282761468024 0.0831039109588 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405188663552 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0571112408075 0.150359130593 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374380829231 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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