According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year , fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year.And yet the percentage of positive reviews about specific Super Screen movies have increased in this year.Clearly,the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough to our prospective viewers.Thus the problem lies not in the quality of our movies but with the lack of awareness that good movies are available.Super Screen Movies should thus allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching public through advertising.
The author makes a decision of allocating a large share of budget based on parameters which might not be self sufficient enough.
First of all in the report studies author mentions "fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies" but fails to clear what fewer means and the statement is a bit ambiguous.
Another point to consider is the authencity of the report, like how trusting it is. There could be n number of reports. How are results from one report better than other reports. The author fails to clarify on to this point.
The author also fails to provide more details on the results of the report. Like who were the people who gave the reviews. Is there any other information about the people who could have affected the result like demographics, age, gender and other things.
The author makes a conclusion that their is not enough awareness among the prospective viewers. It would have been helpful if the author had also mentioned the current steps the company is taking (if any) for creating an awareness.
In all the conlusion which the author make would make more sense if the author would have clarified other assumptions which they might have taken and how that would lead to the success of the company.
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 16
- The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effor 77
- According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year , fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year.And yet the percentage of positive reviews about specific Super Screen movies have increased in th 33
- The first step to self-knowledge is rejection of the familiar. 16
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 36, Rule ID: THEIR_IS
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
...s. The author makes a conclusion that their is not enough awareness among the prosp...
Line 6, column 80, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN
Message: Did you mean 'had clarified'?
Suggestion: had clarified
...ake would make more sense if the author would have clarified other assumptions which they might have...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 55.5748502994 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1026.0 2260.96107784 45% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 212.0 441.139720559 48% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83962264151 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81578560438 4.56307096286 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44454333094 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 204.123752495 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570754716981 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 315.9 705.55239521 45% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.6392333615 57.8364921388 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5 119.503703932 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154035785254 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516942384506 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634683572184 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0756600521124 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680467299094 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.3799401198 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.