The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The statement claims that the promoting of sense of cooperation, rather than competition, for young people for future leadership is the most beneficial for society. In today's society, admittedly, an individual can hardly achieve major accomplishment just from the effort of his or her own. However, this does not preclude the necessity for developing a sense of competition among the young generation. In my opinion, I would agree with the speaker in instilling a sense of cooperation, but the emphasis on competition is still needed.

I agree with the statement in a sense that nearly every major accomplishment must require some form of cooperation between individuals and organizations. And a correct sense of cooperation among leaders, thus, is critical for correct decision making to increase efficiencies in problem-solving. Consider the smartphone that we use every day, for example; none of the smartphones can be manufactured from a single company or even a single country. Processors might come from the US while batteries and screens are produced in South Korea and the entire phone is, ultimately, assembled in China. The very reason behind this inter-company and international cooperation is efficiency. Since firms and countries are specialized in certain fields, such concentration makes them highly efficient in the fields that they are good at. Likewise, science and research follow the same pattern as smartphone production since every institute is specialized in a limited amount of fields, in which it can solve problems and issues much more efficiently than in other institutes. Because these cooperative decisions are the direct and indirect results from the executives or leaders in companies, organizations and countries, instilling the future leaders with a sense of cooperation is, thus, important in guarantee efficiencies in problem-solving.

Not only does cooperation help increase efficiency in problem-solving, but it is also a bridle for competition. The correct amount of emphasis on cooperation is critical in preventing over-competition, which can be harmful to the overall social productivity, from happening. Since resources in a society, such as natural minerals, time and money, is limited, over-competition will likely cause extreme inefficiencies in using those resources. Just like the smartphone example mentioned in the last paragraph, had companies or countries stopped the supply of their technologies or products, others would be forced to develop their own. By repeating the process of developing the same technology, time, money and other precious resources, which could be devoted to some other more meaningful fields, are wasted. In short, promoting a sense of cooperation for future leaders gives us more control over the competition to prevent it from develope unchecked.

For those who disagree with the statement might argue that competition is the main driving force for progress since competition forces companies to develop new products and lower prices in the market. Thus, the positions as leaders or executives, especially in the world of business calls for the ability of competition. As in today's competitive society, any organizations with leaders that failed to keep up with the competition is likely to fall as well, and it is the competition that forced the happening of innovations and progress. However, the emphasis on competition is not inconsistent with the need to instilling a sense of cooperation. As oftentimes, competition and cooperation come together and a balance between would yield the best result.

In a nutshell, if we took the speaker's claim to the extreme side of cooperation, we would risk the society to be lack of competition and as a result a lack of innovation and progress. On a balance, I agree with the claim that a sense of cooperation is critical for the future leaders, and we shall also keep competition in mind to make efficient and meaningful progress.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, likewise, so, still, thus, well, while, for example, in short, such as, as a result, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 95.0 58.6224719101 162% => OK
Nominalization: 41.0 12.9106741573 318% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3347.0 2235.4752809 150% => OK
No of words: 618.0 442.535393258 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41585760518 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98594081286 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2756376882 2.79657885939 117% => OK
Unique words: 288.0 215.323595506 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466019417476 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1060.2 704.065955056 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6937747218 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.88 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.72 23.4991977007 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88 5.21951772744 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22032849772 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676669826193 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075170832684 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137639318394 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0810976618328 0.0667264976115 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 100.480337079 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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