The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Well the claim is regarding leadersip qualities or preparation of young people for leadership in various functioning fields in our society. Leadership requires to have belief and reliance on you among the people you are leading in addition to the organisational or work related intellect. I would say both competition and cooperation are needed to be instilled for good leadership.
Competition do have many positive effects provided the person having this spirit is aware of consequences of it when being overused. It's like a tool which can be used to provide some aggression in your or the people's working whom you are leading. It's needed to exhort the people under you to compete with themselves or their difficult counterparts which in turn makes them push hard on their capabilities and strength. For a person to perform to its best and to improve on its skill, he has to push beyond what he is currently capable, for that to happen a good competition plays a rolr of catalyst. It gives that feeling which makes you beat you limitations. And when a leader is able to foment this spirit among the people under him, it's obvious they are really to going to achieve something wonderful.
Along with the competitve skill we need to push ourselves beyond our limits, we also need to a sense of cooperation. It's like a competitive spirit is a tool which will accelerate you but need to put it under control and use it where its required. That curbing requires a sense of cooperation. You really need to understand why you are accelerating in anything, what's your goal ? A leader having cooperative skill can guide you on the goals which can be helpful for the society we are thriving. He needs to have a sense that he should be controlling competition not the other way around. He needs to timely counsel his organization to the goal they have and to prevent himself and his organization deviating from it. So cooperation is like compensating factor for the energetic competition we need, which makes it's helping us use the competitive spirit at right places and in right amount.
Overall I believe cooperation along with competive spirit is really the key for any organization to achieve exceptional goals and leader has to vanguard this journey, so he needs to have a sense of using both of the qualities as an when they are needed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, regarding, so, still, well, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 403.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79404466501 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84157984613 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481389578164 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8866508155 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.333333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225213765183 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777500010597 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631205154123 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145771412845 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673558810194 0.0667264976115 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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