The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
A nation that focuses on teaching its young people to emphasize cooperation instead of competition, can enjoy a great amount of social benefits. The majority of leaders would aim to improve the country, as opposed to holding on to power for their own selfish reasons.
One example where cooperation is displayed is in the army. They are taught to see everyone as their family, and the fundamental principle of never leaving someone behind. In the battlefield, they are united against the enemy. This benefits all the parties involved. Upper ranking members can easily manage their ranks and ask them to follow directions properly. Whereas individuals at the bottom of the rank, understand that following those rules will benefit them and their safety, but also the one of the nation they are serving. This basic premise exemplifies why cooperation is necessary to establish basic order and discipline.
Furthermore, if competition were the founding principle behind the elected leaders, there would be profound social programs. Jails would be used to rehabilitate individuals, as opposed to the way we use to punish those citizens. Homelessness would be tackled in an effective manner as to help those in need find a firm ground to become productive members of society. Mental issues would be deemed an important issue to research and treat. Healthcare would not have the exhorbitant prices as it currently does. Politicians would not fight about what social programs to keep. Instead, they would focus on the data as to how improve the lives of everyone in need.
Nonetheless, opponents to this idea will argue that we currently live in a country where competition has led to innovation. Consequently, this has made us better than anyone else in the world. Although, the country has benefitted from having individuals with a spirit of competition, too much of it can cause deep issues in society. One we see at the moment is inequality. The competitiveness of those making high sums of money, has led them to find ways to enrich themselves by making sure politicians respond to them instead of the general public. Decades of this mentality has driven inequality through the roof. We currently live in a society where people have to work two or three jobs to provide for their family. If the leaders valued cooperation more than competition, this would not be the issue it is today.
Teaching cooperation to the young would lead to a better society. An example of the military shows how this makes them stay united by taking care of everyone. Furthermore, the system of competition we have in the country has led to a large amount of social issues. This divide over cooperation and competition has only exhacerbated inequality and pushed us to a point where many people don't have faith in the elected leaders to do what is best for the country. Most of those issues would not exist if cooperation was a fundamental value that we all shared.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, nonetheless, so, whereas, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2460.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 493.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98985801217 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80542269621 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503042596349 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1124784319 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8275862069 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.51724137931 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0751549681561 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0187159834004 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0285516919765 0.0758088955206 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0520315931691 0.150359130593 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356624955288 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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