The best way for a society to prepare its young people for a leadership in government, industry, or other fields by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Young population of any country govern the present and future of the any country since with there fresh idea and full of energy can be very helpful for progress. Thus, guiding this young people properly and with proper bases become very important. Prompt recommand that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in goverment, industry, or other field is by isntilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competion. In my opinion, in differnt condition different approach (Cooperation or competition )of leadership will work. This can be understand with the example given below.
To beign, In a industries team manger has a resposibility of a group of people. Those people work together with common aim and team lead or manger play very important role for fullfill that common aim. Thus manager or team lead must have a cooperative scense to all team member for proper flow of work. For instance, team is given a task and this task need to be completed within certail time limi. The task was going properly but due to some problem at the end stage of task part of it not working properly. At this stage team lead can corporate the team member and ask for some extention in time limit instances of many them work for more than 14 hours in day for completion of task. If team member will get etra time of one week them they can complete task without any flaw in task on the other hand if manger force team member to compete task in given time only then there is good chance that many flaws will appear in the end. Thus this cooperative nature must be tought to people form young age only.
On the contrast, some time this competitive leaderdship thing will also work. For instance in some goverment sector two field are given a different task that those who complete it first will be awarded with the bouns. In this case if team lead is not taking this task then other team may be come first. May be both team will complete task within a time limit but team which taken there task as a competion with other team will able to complete it first and will win bouns.
In conclusion, Both competition approach and cooperation approach for leadership can work in goverment or industry but which approach work properly depen on the nature of task given. With proper bonding cooperatioin approach work while in condition of comptition other will work
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, then, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 420.0 442.535393258 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66904761905 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40748431472 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457142857143 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 597.6 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9803285403 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.210526316 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1052631579 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20541235037 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806608497109 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149748314161 0.0758088955206 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148004873596 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128475248548 0.0667264976115 193% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.1392134831 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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