The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The contention that society instills a sense of cooperation not competition into young people is not a trivial one. There are several factors that need to be considered before determining which path the society will follow for their young people. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with the claims stated above for two reasons.
First of all, competition is an integral part of our day to day life. From the day we started our schooling in kindergarten the parents instill a sense of competition among the children. The reason behind this phenomenon is the children who secured good results among the others were rewarded only. On the contrary, cooperation obviously a good norms to learn from childhood; there were no rewards for cooperating in your school life. Take for example, during the time of the election the candidates of the opposing parties hold a competitive posture rather than cooperation. If the reputation of the opposition candidate is somewhat good the other party always tries to besmirch him. For this very reason, a sense of competition must be instilled in young people for sustaining in their future life.
Secondly, healthy competition in the workplace is always good for prospering your career to the next level. For instance, in your workplace, a sense of cooperation among the employees is necessary for completing the assigned task in a group. On the other hand, your promotion in the job place is also dependent on your performance among all the other employees. With this in the mind, one should carry a competitive attitude from their early childhood which will help them to prosper in a career. Take an example, when a company is recruiting people for their organization, they look for the students with a good GPA among the others. They don't look for students who are cooperative in their school days or not. In order to sustain in this world of competition young people must be instilled with a sense of competition rather than cooperation.
Instilling a sense of cooperation is also necessary for decorum in society. Furthermore, a sense of competitiveness is much more crying needs to instill in the young people for their future advancement and adaptability with inimical conditions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, for example, for instance, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 14.8657303371 13% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 368.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07880434783 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89708961702 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2494480343 60.3974514979 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.3684210526 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3684210526 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15789473684 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288518719865 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104280660348 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693350894079 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215096947859 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258140671515 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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