The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Leadership is always considered to be one of the most significant characteristics that should be nurtured and developed in the process of a young people's growth. There are a couple of ways to instill this capacity: either by encouraging them to work in teams or providing a competitive atmosphere to abet their willingness to win. As far as I am concerned, however, I consider encouraging cooperation a more effective and efficient way.

To begin with, a cooperative team means a bigger achievement. Thanks to the development of technological advancements, last decades have seen incredible growth and improvement of human society. And thogether with this, the way people work has also changed tremendously. In high-tech compenies, for example, computer programs are written by a team of employees and the promotion are handed to a specialized team after a certain app is built. This kind of cooperation renders it possible for companies to reach an achievement which can never be accomplished by a single person inside the team. Working on one's own and then compete with others has no means to train the ability of leadership, and the achievement is bound to be limited.

Secondly, working in a team also means learning from the team memebers, which will in turn fortify the capability of leadership. Take a financial institution for an example. If a company want to go IPO and get listed, an investment bank is likely to be involved, where number of departments are going to work together closely to help their client successfully get listed. This is actually a great opportunity for people from different department to learn from each other: the S&T employees and learn ways to do equity research from the research team, while front desk people can learn the way that their S&T co-workers make markets. This mutual learning process is definitely beneficial in that it can reveal different personalities and norms of different department, which will help leaders unify people from various backgrouds together in the future.

However, I have to admit that there are some cases where benign competitions can also be advantagous. For example, we do need to provide a platform for young people to showcase their leadership, and for us to discover the ones with greater potential. But I also think this competitive atmosphere shoule be built on a generaly coopereative platform, or the competions can become cruel and have just the opposite effect.

In conclusion, I do believe that leadership is nurtured mainly in the process of cooperation, since team work provide young people with more opportunities to learn and renders it possible for them to achieve bigger. Although it's true that benign competitions can act as encouragements to some extent, cooperation is still something that should be emphasized and instilled.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'mean'?
Suggestion: mean
... To begin with, a cooperative team means a bigger achievement. Thanks to the dev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20043572985 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08472421282 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522875816993 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 738.0 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5356044313 60.3974514979 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.631578947 118.986275619 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1578947368 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.21951772744 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19488835823 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622790509042 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647828475144 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123126604822 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260409252381 0.0667264976115 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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