Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
APJ Abdul Kalam had said, ' Dream is not what you see in sleep, but what does not let you sleep.' If one is passionate about achieving something and dreams of it, then it is in the direction of this dream that one must tread. The claim that more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals is quite subjective. The reason behind the claim is subjective too. What one considers a worthy goal may not be worthy as perceived by another.
The pursuit of worthy goals may be futile or fortuitous, depending on the individual's attitude towards the same. Just as worthy has a different meaning from individual to individual, selfish dreams' meaning too differs person by person. Sometimes people need to get selfish, after all, one's own happiness and peace of mind is also a concern.
We have no right of tagging people's dreams as selfish. Every dream or goal is set for a reason. The reason is deep rooted within the individual. If there is a passion, there is a way to achieve the dream. Once mustn't stop dreaming. Because it is in the pursuit of these dreams, that our true potential is unveiled. One needs to be dedicated and truthful, however, in following the dream.
For example, Babita Phogat, an Olympic wrestler from India was living and trying to achieve the dream her father and coach, Mahavir Phogat dreamt. People around him in his village and many others called him selfish for making his daughter give up on her fancy childhood only to see her become a wrestler. But what they did not see was that Babita had immense potential of winning and getting a gold medal for the country and in turn, making the nation proud. Mahavir even gave up on his daily job to coach her. Mahavir was indeed a visionary. He followed his dream, and it did come true.
Thus, it depends on several factors on what kind of goal to follow, and most importantly on the individual. The person must be willing to not simply follow the goal or dream, but follow with true dedication, passion and pride. In my opinion, no dream is big or small, the dreamer's efforts are.
I would conclude with the saying - "Dare to Dream".
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, thus, after all, for example, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65782493369 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4223156047 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572944297082 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1524101467 60.3974514979 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.24 118.986275619 59% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 15.08 23.4991977007 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25760801744 0.243740707755 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672514005436 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638516155017 0.0758088955206 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13586697591 0.150359130593 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581309687256 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 14.1392134831 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 48.8420337079 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 12.1743820225 56% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 100.480337079 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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