Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
"Follow your dream" as been the advice given by many to young people. However, popularity do not necessary equals truth. The idea of doing whatever one's heart desires is extremely idealist. In addition to doing what one's is passionate about, one should also consider the practicality of such pursuit. Indeed, picking a worth goal should be emphasized, though it is because of the consequences of blindly pursuing a goal instead of the selfish nature the goal.
Granted, some people are inherently selfish, but most people's dreams are not deleterious to the general public, and therefore, need not be worried about. In dreams, practicality is not a concern, especially for young people. If you were to ask a kid or a teenager what their dreams is, the ambitious ones will answer winning Noble prize, getting Turing award, becoming the CEO of a multinational company, while the humble ones will say something along the line of having a happy family or having a lots of friends. It can certainly be claimed that those dreams are inherently selfish. Winning grand prizes is for fame, becoming CEO is for financial rewards, and even friends and families are for personal happiness. However, even if the dreams are ultimately selfish, they have neutral, or even positive impact on the society. Therefore, the selfish nature of the dreams need not be a concern.
However, more emphasis do need to be placed on picking a worth goal because of most young people's disregard for practicality. Young people are inherently ambitious. They have just stepped into the society, and do not know their own limit. In their minds, they are capable of anything as long as they are willing to try. Therefore, they are extremely prone to picking unrealistic goals, or at least ignore the price they have to pay to achieve the goal. For example, a teenager may aspire to become a world-class pianist. It might be the teenager's dream. However, when the teenager picks his or her goal, he or she may not be considering the long practice hours that have to be put into achieving this goal, the possibility of failing, and what will he or she do afterwards. It is important to tell young people to consider the practicality of their dreams and will they be able to face the potential failure. More emphasis on picking worthy goals is needed, because young people tends to hold idealist views of the world and therefore ignore the impracticality of their goals.
In conclusion, young people need more caution on picking worthy goals when they are encourage to pursuit their dreams, but not because their dreams are inherently selfish, but because they need to take practicality into account. Even though many dreams are selfish, they are not harmful to the society, and as such need not be warned against. Instead, the practicality of goals is a major consideration, and therefore, emphasis on picking the right goal is needed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...quals truth. The idea of doing whatever ones heart desires is extremely idealist. In...
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...oples dreams are not deleterious to the general public, and therefore, need not be worried abo...
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Line 3, column 497, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...line of having a happy family or having a lots of friends. It can certainly be claimed...
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Line 5, column 760, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...ity of failing, and what will he or she do afterwards. It is important to tell you...
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Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'encouraged'.
Suggestion: encouraged
...n on picking worthy goals when they are encourage to pursuit their dreams, but not becaus...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'at least', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.189285714286 0.240241500013 79% => OK
Verbs: 0.178571428571 0.157235817809 114% => OK
Adjectives: 0.107142857143 0.0880659088768 122% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0732142857143 0.0497285424764 147% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0517857142857 0.0444667217837 116% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0982142857143 0.12292977631 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0571428571429 0.0406280797675 141% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.70737496793 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0321428571429 0.030933414821 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0803571428571 0.0997080785238 81% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0196428571429 0.0249443105267 79% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0125 0.0148568991511 84% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2915.0 2732.02544248 107% => OK
No of words: 490.0 452.878318584 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.94897959184 6.0361032391 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.371428571429 0.366273622748 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275510204082 0.280924506359 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.19387755102 0.200843997647 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1 0.132149295362 76% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70737496793 2.79330140395 97% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 219.290929204 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.455102040816 0.48968727796 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.7765931406 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.6 23.380412469 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0915902559 59.4972553346 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6 141.124799967 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6 23.380412469 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.48 0.674092028746 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 47.1510204082 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.13529411765 1.64882698954 69% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403529570624 0.391690518653 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109687256156 0.123202303941 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0885759727846 0.077325440228 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.445606147883 0.547984918172 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154719438815 0.149214159877 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14810082311 0.161403998019 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0876986957406 0.0892212321368 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.449885575225 0.385218514788 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0861310223086 0.0692045440612 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.290263241345 0.275328986314 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0227314342471 0.0653680567796 35% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.5995575221 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.