An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The international development organization's attempt to help combat vitamin A deficiency is very well intended and promising, however, a few questions need to answered before the validity of the recommendation that the government of Tagus should promote the new type of millet high in vitamin A can be accessed.
First, the organization need to consider whether the government subsidies for growing the new type of millet will offset the high cost of the seeds. If subsidies can not offset the cost of seeds, farmer may choose not to the grow the new type of millet hight in vitamin A. Even if they do choose to grow the new type of millet, the high cost of seeds will inevitably bring up the market price of the millet. In both cases, the millet high in vitamin A will be unaccessible to the already impoverished people, and therefore, the recommendation will not be able to the achieve the intended effect of combating vitamin A deficiency.
Second, the organization should ask if introducing a new strain of millet high in vitamin A is most efficient way of combating vitamin A deficiency. Perhaps there is a cheaper, more effective way of solving this problem, like distributing free vitamin A supplements. If there is a better way of providing the people of Tagus the vitamin A they needed, then the government should consider the alternative solution instead of promoting the new strain.
Finally, even if the new type of millet is the best way of providing vitamin A to the people of Tagus, the organization still need to consider if vitamin A deficiency is the most urgent concern for the people of Tagus. For example, if most people in Tagus is still facing hunger, then the government probably should focus on combating hunger instead of vitamin A deficiency. In this case adopting the organization's suggestion of promoting a new strain of millet high in vitamin A will not only not provide the expected result since most people will not access to the millet, but also worse the issue of hunger since funds for combating hunger was diverted.
Though the recommendation is aimed to help the people of Tagus gain more vitamin A, the questions listed above need to be answered before the results of the recommendation can be reliably predicted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...cost of seeds, farmer may choose not to the grow the new type of millet hight in vitamin...
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Line 3, column 564, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... the recommendation will not be able to the achieve the intended effect of combating vitami...
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Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A supplement' or simply 'supplements'?
Suggestion: A supplement; Supplements
...problem, like distributing free vitamin A supplements. If there is a better way of providing ...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'A' or 'they'?
Suggestion: A; They
...oviding the people of Tagus the vitamin A they needed, then the government should cons...
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Line 7, column 402, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'organizations'' or 'organization's'?
Suggestion: organizations'; organization's
...A deficiency. In this case adopting the organizations suggestion of promoting a new strain of...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.265700483092 0.25644967241 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.142512077295 0.15541462614 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0821256038647 0.0836205057962 98% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0724637681159 0.0520304965353 139% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0048309178744 0.0272364105082 18% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.132850241546 0.125424944231 106% => OK
Participles: 0.048309178744 0.0416121511921 116% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.89689986168 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0289855072464 0.026700313972 109% => OK
Particles: 0.0024154589372 0.001811407834 133% => OK
Determiners: 0.142512077295 0.113004496875 126% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0338164251208 0.0255425247493 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.0127820249294 0% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2259.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 384.0 446.07635468 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8828125 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.57801047555 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.377604166667 0.378187486979 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260416666667 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.169270833333 0.208842608468 81% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122395833333 0.135150697306 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89689986168 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 207.018472906 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.390625 0.469332199767 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 40.5726955433 52.1807786196 78% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.039408867 60% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 23.2022227129 138% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2257334273 57.7814097925 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 188.25 141.986410481 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 23.2022227129 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.16666666667 0.724660767414 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 58.0416666667 51.9672348444 112% => OK
Elegance: 2.03296703297 1.8405768891 110% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.527631384968 0.441005458295 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.295218257086 0.135418324435 218% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.130148100883 0.0829849096947 157% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.787077343643 0.58762219726 134% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.135973225276 0.147661913831 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.313947479473 0.193483328276 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818699732558 0.0970749176394 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.549638463199 0.42659136922 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0759354514671 0.0774707102158 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.385950877817 0.312017818177 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0857684033545 0.0698173142475 123% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.87684729064 29% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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