The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The idea that strong individual can emerge only through hardship has been well established and accepted. Indeed, similar sayings expressing this idea can be found in nearly all languages. However, this idea rises the question of whether the world we live in today, with all the modern convenience and comfort, is still capable of creating people with strong and independent personalities. The answer is a definite yes. Though technology advances have made living easier, life today is just as challenging as it used to be, thus, our current environment can still create powerful individuals, though it no longer forces everybody to be one.
Though it may appears that our lives is much simpler due to the advent of modern technology, life is just as full of adversity as it used to be. For every problem technology solves, it creates a new one. When wireless network and search engines were created, people suddenly gained access to nearly all the information in the world. They were no longer trouble by the limited amount of information they can access, nor do they need to remember everything they might need, budgeting the space available in their brain. Life seem to be simplified. However, this advancement also created new challenges. The tremendous amount of information available makes it difficult to find the useful information from all the other irrelevant once. Now, instead of learning to remember, people have to learn to shuffle through huge amount of data looking for useful ones efficiently. Life is not really simplified, it just becomes difficult in a different way. Today’s world is not devoid of obstacle, it is simply populated with ones we haven’t seen before.
As there are still sufficient adversities in our world, people can still develop strong, independent personalities, though all the modern convenience might give one the choice to not do so. For those who just want to past the time, life is undoubtedly easier. In past, people have to struggle just to survive, which in turn force them to become strong independent individuals; now, with the living condition largely improved, people can do nearly nothing and still get by. The hardship everyone have to go through in the past forces them to become strong independent individuals, will today’s society give people the choice to not become one. However, for those who wants to achieve something, there are still ample challenges available to help them develop a powerful personality. They will need to learn to budget their time, adapt to new environment quickly, and multitask. In modern society, people can still develop a strong character, thought they also have the choice to not to.
In conclusion, the world today is still populated with various challenges, though surviving is arguably getting easier. Consequently, our society is still capable of creating strong independent individuals, though it no longer forces everyone to become one, as the society in the past does.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...all languages. However, this idea rises the question of whether the world we live in today, with all th...
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Line 3, column 927, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...y simplified, it just becomes difficult in a different way. Today's world is not devoid of ob...
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Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'In the past'?
Suggestion: In the past
...t the time, life is undoubtedly easier. In past, people have to struggle just to surviv...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'consequently', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'well', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206093189964 0.240241500013 86% => OK
Verbs: 0.166666666667 0.157235817809 106% => OK
Adjectives: 0.094982078853 0.0880659088768 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.094982078853 0.0497285424764 191% => Less adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0465949820789 0.0444667217837 105% => OK
Prepositions: 0.089605734767 0.12292977631 73% => OK
Participles: 0.0340501792115 0.0406280797675 84% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.80984800496 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0483870967742 0.030933414821 156% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0645161290323 0.0997080785238 65% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0215053763441 0.0249443105267 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0089605734767 0.0148568991511 60% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2985.0 2732.02544248 109% => OK
No of words: 483.0 452.878318584 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1801242236 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.403726708075 0.366273622748 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275362318841 0.280924506359 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188405797101 0.200843997647 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136645962733 0.132149295362 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80984800496 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 219.290929204 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472049689441 0.48968727796 96% => OK
Word variations: 53.9089364545 55.4138127331 97% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.125 23.380412469 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.0291431627 59.4972553346 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.375 141.124799967 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 23.380412469 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 47.6612318841 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.06976744186 1.64882698954 65% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313635188569 0.391690518653 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.109765292972 0.123202303941 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.103096110403 0.077325440228 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.459461073819 0.547984918172 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169809311407 0.149214159877 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114241241024 0.161403998019 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823111012473 0.0892212321368 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.402429860358 0.385218514788 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.01146147567 0.0692045440612 17% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227794438152 0.275328986314 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386053236617 0.0653680567796 59% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 7.22455752212 208% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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