Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The Author's claim that young people should pick worthy goals, albeit the advice "follow your dreams" seems tenuous. An individual should follow whatever he/she is passionate about, and should not compromise with their dreams and goals.
First of all, let's focus more on what is a worthy dreams. There is nothing called "worthy dreams," all dreams are worthy for an individual, if he/she is passionate about his goals. Worthy dream is not just becoming a doctor, an engineer or a scientist, it can be anything like musician, dancer, athlete, beat boxer, singer and much more. One cannot just say all the above mentioned is not a worthy dreams. If Eminem has become a doctor instead of becoming a rapper, he would have been not called a "rap god" or would have not been so successful in his career.
Moreover, it highly likely for an individual to succeed in his life if he/she follow his/her dreams. If they are really ardent about their passion, they should work more effectively towards achieving their goals. For example, if an individual has chosen to follow something he is not passionate about, he would have ended up being mediocre in that field and would have regretted entire life for not following his/her dreams. It's pithy to follow your goals if you are passionate and want to convert your dream into your work.
In addition, yes many people’s dreams are inherently selfish, but there is no harm in it. If an individual has a penchant for something and he/she is good in doing something they like, they will most likely follow it as his/her dream.
In conclusion, Young people should follow their dreams, albeit of what other people say about their dreams and goals. There is no proper definition for worthy dreams. Dreams, which an individual is passionate about and want it to convert into his/her work is a worthy dream. At last, there is no harm in finding your dreams through your inherent selfishness, unless he/she is passionate about pursuing his/her dream.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...re is nothing called 'worthy dreams,' all dreams are worthy for an individua...
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Line 3, column 507, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...a rapper, he would have been not called a 'rap god' or would have not b...
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Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'follows'.
Suggestion: follows
...vidual to succeed in his life if he/she follow his/her dreams. If they are really arde...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, really, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0059347181 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57666911571 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477744807122 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 704.065955056 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.26513549 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2352941176 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8235294118 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30971053818 0.243740707755 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125246228095 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1059914896 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208573344682 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0860602090093 0.0667264976115 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 100.480337079 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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