Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author's argument that the Pirouettes Ballet School should be preferred over any other dance school because they have the most intensive program, their teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world and many of their students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies seems plausible at first glance. However, the author's premises and assumption, on which he is making the argument that the Pirouettes Ballet School is a clear choice, seems tenuous and need more clarification.
The primary issue lies in the author's premises that of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program. The author claims that the Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child, but aforementioned, it has the most intensive program only in Elmtown, but what about the dance schools outside Elmtown. The author fails to give any substantial evidentiary support that the Pirouettes Ballet School is a clear choice than any other dance school located outside Elmtown. It might be possible that the schools which is located outside Elmtown also have very insightful program.
In addition, the author fails to give the link between the teachers who have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world and the teacher who have good qualification in teaching ballet. The author assumes that the teachers who have participated in the most prestigious ballet companies are skilled to train students in ballet.
Also, the author mentioned that many of their students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies, but fails to give the evidentiary support. In order to persuade the readers, if author has given the statistics of the students who have gone to become professional dancers will have strengthen his argument.
In sum, if the author wants to convince the readers that the Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child, he need to largely reconstruct his irrational argument, fix the flaws, remove the assumptions, and clearly provide the substantial evidentiary support in order to persuade readers that the Pirouettes Ballet School is first choice for any student.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument that the Pirouettes Ballet Sch...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...bout the dance schools outside Elmtown. The author fails to give any substantial ev...
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Line 7, column 309, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...o become professional dancers will have strengthen his argument. In sum, if the author ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1865.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 355.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25352112676 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68568172576 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.383098591549 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 554.4 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.3669574039 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.545454545 119.503703932 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2727272727 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.624586579155 0.218282227539 286% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.281247945804 0.0743258471296 378% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142220677772 0.0701772020484 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.363554965627 0.128457276422 283% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147505358215 0.0628817314937 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.