Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based
A great person once said "dreams are not which you get in your sleep;But are those which doesn't let you sleep". this implies that simply thinking about something as a dream or a fancy wouldn't be fruitful. we should strive towards achieving the same with hardwork and relentless determination. dreams are the key things which can make the difference between just getting through life or leading a life with meaning , striving to achieve something.
The above claim states that simply having goals is not enough, we will have to make sure that they are meaningful and worthy. this can imply that one should always try to pick goals which are striving for the greater good of the society that they are living in. Breaking beyond the barriers of setting goals which are self-centered and reaching out to take up efforts to achieve a nobler cause should be the criteria. it is necessary that people should consider the human aspects of any issue before thinking on practical and the mechanical side of it. this thinking would ultimately sensitize them towards trying to lead life which is much more considerate and humane.this positive and broader approach of thinking will lead to people going beyond their own selfish desires and dreams.
Every person in this world is inherently responsible for making it a much better place than what they were brought into, before leaving it. Supporting the need of reaching out beyond one's own self and understanding other humans and their needs on the whole, will be helpful in building a better society. For people who want to help, taking up roles which have the power of changing someone's fate by fulfilling their needs is essential. people shouldn't be forced to take up things rather encouraged to come forward voluntarily to do what it takes to change the world. If everyone would just be thinking about them selves then it wouldn't take much time for the world around us to crumble like pack of cards. helping each other should be what we dream on along with helping thyself.
However, an extremely altruistic attitude without thinking about what one should do to satisfy his own needs will also not lead to any growth. this attitude, will ultimately in the wrong run, will lack the necessary drive nad direction which is essential to help others. people who lose sight and control of what their life is shaping into which can mean denying one's own necessity will be destroyed.this attitude of preaching on what is right to all people without considering the circumstances that people find themselves in, would definitely be taking the extremity which ultimately ends up destroying much more than what was actually going on. There should be a perfect balance achieved between taking up personal necessities as dreams and considering the effect they can have on the society in general in order to live a life which is balanced and happy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 95, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...u get in your sleep;But are those which doesnt let you sleep'. this implies that ...
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Suggestion: This
...those which doesnt let you sleep'. this implies that simply thinking about some...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...g about something as a dream or a fancy wouldnt be fruitful. we should strive towards a...
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Suggestion: We
...a dream or a fancy wouldnt be fruitful. we should strive towards achieving the sam...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Dreams
... hardwork and relentless determination. dreams are the key things which can make the d...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ough life or leading a life with meaning , striving to achieve something. Th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... something. The above claim states that simply having goals is not enough, ...
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Suggestion: This
...re that they are meaningful and worthy. this can imply that one should always try to...
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Suggestion: It
... a nobler cause should be the criteria. it is necessary that people should conside...
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Suggestion: People
...by fulfilling their needs is essential. people shouldnt be forced to take up things ra...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...illing their needs is essential. people shouldnt be forced to take up things rather enco...
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Line 7, column 609, Rule ID: THEM_SELVES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'themselves'?
Suggestion: themselves
...f everyone would just be thinking about them selves then it wouldnt take much time for the ...
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Suggestion: wouldn't
...t be thinking about them selves then it wouldnt take much time for the world around us ...
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Suggestion: Helping
...round us to crumble like pack of cards. helping each other should be what we dream on a...
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Suggestion: This
...needs will also not lead to any growth. this attitude, will ultimately in the wrong ...
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Suggestion: People
...tion which is essential to help others. people who lose sight and control of what thei...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve a life which is balanced and happy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, then, in general, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 488.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9487704918 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53760572047 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516393442623 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3405930293 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.105263158 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6842105263 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57894736842 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217266523875 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669334700132 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0547025665558 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141221818786 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369650675173 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.