Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
The above topic emphasizes on the idea whether young people should follow thier dreams or whether they should focus on picking worthy goals.Both the arguments has it's merits but I feel that young people should follow their dreams as it will enhance their career as they will be living a happy life and will have no regrets.
Firstly, I feel that if people don't pursue the career in which they are interested then they will not be happy and they will face a lot of problems in their day to day life. People will have to struggle a lot of they end up in a field which has great worth but is not of their forte.It will not make a person happy rather make his time difficult as will have to struggle a lot in his life. For example, if someone is an amazing wildlife photographer but because of family pressure he has to enroll in engineering will ruin his career as he will be doing things which he is not interested for life long.A person may earn plethora of money in engineering but he wont be able to sleep at night happily as he is not following his passion.
Secondly, I feel that if a person opts for something which has worth but is not of his forte then there are high chances that he won't be able to focus well on what he is pursuing.Because of lack of focus he won't land up in becoming the best in whatever he does.A person won't be able to give his best if he doesn't follow his passion which will further hamper his overall performance.Because of less interest a person will become torpid and there are high chances of him getting indulged in bad activities.For example , if a person is interested in dancing and wants to select dancing as a career but because Web development has more scope than dancing and he takes up taking web development.Now both the fields are totally different so he won't be able to give his best shot in web development sue to lack of interest because of which he will tend to ruin his entire career.
Therefore if a person ends up selecting his dream as a profession then he will be able to achieve great success as he will be very much dedicated towards his work.It will also help him live a healthy and happy life.On the contrary if he ends up selecting a profession which has great worth but is not his dream the won't be able to focus properly and end up regretting for his whole life
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, for example, i feel, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35172413793 5.05705443957 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50169015336 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409195402299 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.2370786517 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 72.0 23.0359550562 313% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 229.599954026 60.3974514979 380% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 315.5 118.986275619 265% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 72.5 23.4991977007 309% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.6666666667 5.21951772744 396% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106813955867 0.243740707755 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0755069381518 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501877567878 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911668698684 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557085855275 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.3 14.1392134831 250% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 15.32 48.8420337079 31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.0 12.1743820225 238% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.13 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.8971910112 147% => OK
gunning_fog: 30.8 11.2143820225 275% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.7820224719 263% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.