Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
I believe "Follow your dreams" is a very commonplace and incomplete statement or advice given to young people.
This statement implies that no matter how many hurdles one has to pass through, one has to always chase their dreams and fulfill them. This is indeed very necessary as it is often proved that one who fulfills their dreams is the happiest. Whereas others who pursue anything other that their dreams are not proved to be the happiest. No matter how successful they are, there is always a void left in them.
Although dreaming big and fulfilling them is of utmost importance, one has to always remember that the type of dreams or goals one sets for themselves is also important. As it not determines their future but also portrays their character. For example, many people dream to become rich, but not many ponder upon what path to take to be rich.
We often hear stories of criminal activities, robbery, smuggling cases in daily basis. The accused people are not criminals or smugglers by birth. These people are one of those people who have taken the wrong path in order to fulfill their goals selfishly.
One should always dream. A person who dreams big, grows big. But it is also necessary that the goals one sets for themselves are worthy. Because pursuing worthy goals makes a person successful and worthy in true sense.
Therefore, I conclude that instead of just setting goals or asking young people to set goals for themselves, more emphasis should be given on setting worthy goals which are not driven by selfishness. This will help them to think and aim right from the starting line itself.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...one has to always chase their dreams and fulfill them. This is indeed very necess...
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... fulfills their dreams is the happiest. Whereas others who pursue anything other that t...
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... The accused people are not criminals or smugglers by birth. These people are one...
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...smugglers by birth. These people are one of those people who have taken the wrong...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, therefore, whereas, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 58.6224719101 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1358.0 2235.4752809 61% => OK
No of words: 279.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86738351254 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44901767939 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541218637993 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 704.065955056 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8194083344 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8823529412 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4117647059 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11764705882 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195027733963 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611792541207 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664047636275 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115724983667 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725591162856 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 100.480337079 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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