Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.

Dreams are kind of goal which person wants to achieve. Some dreams are just quixotic and trying to achieving them is just wasting of time. So, I agree with claim that more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals but doesn't agree with reason.

Dreams are kind of a long term goal. Dream is not the thing which can be achieve overnight. More than just imagination to achieve them long term goals require lots of efforts and proper utilization of time to achieve them. The great fastest 100 meter runner Hussain Bolt has a dream of becoming fastest runner. To run in faster in race for just 10 minutes he has to practice around 10 years every day to achieve his dream. With his persistent efforts and dedication he is in a position where we can see that he has achieved his dream. So dream should be such that which will motivates us to achieve it.

Dreams should be realistic. Many people say that they want to be rich, want to be successful , want to marry a beautiful man/woman etc. They just dream about it and didn't not do anything to achieve it. Some of them plan to achieve it but, since to achieve it is long term process they just give up in the middle.There's one famous line saying that dreams are not which makes us sleeps, but dreams are the things which makes us to wake up to achieve them. So, dream should be realistic which would keep us motivated.

Sometimes, dreams are inherently selfish. One person's dreams will definitely different from the other. And they will have different reasons for having such a dream. Most of the students have dream to achieve good marks in the exam but only few students are able to achieve it. So, despites dreams may be selfish, it's there efforts which will drag them to their goals.

So, dream should be picked so that it will motivate us to achieve it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...oesnt agree with reason. Dreams are kind of a long term goal. Dream is not the thing...
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...ee with reason. Dreams are kind of a long term goal. Dream is not the thing w...
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...at fastest 100 meter runner Hussain Bolt has a dream of becoming fastest runner. ...
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...y want to be rich, want to be successful , want to marry a beautiful man/woman etc...
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...woman etc. They just dream about it and didnt not do anything to achieve it. Some of ...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
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...eve it but, since to achieve it is long term process they just give up in the middle...
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Line 7, column 192, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'dreamed', 'dreamt'.
Suggestion: dreamed; dreamt
...such a dream. Most of the students have dream to achieve good marks in the exam but o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, as to, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 330.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52424242424 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22881293214 2.79657885939 80% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.59117977528 82% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3926356655 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0952380952 118.986275619 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 15.7142857143 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.52380952381 5.21951772744 29% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158676858753 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672234515773 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539156144155 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112143342106 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0307895000489 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 14.1392134831 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 48.8420337079 167% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 12.1743820225 46% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 12.1639044944 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.38706741573 81% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 100.480337079 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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