Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Younger generation have a lot more responsibility to bring change in the world for betterment of the people. To question the norms, conventions,traditions, rituals that are not in humanity's favour and take a step ahead to bring considerable change.
A lot has been changed since a past few decades. Children tend to have a sense of maturity and understanding about the world at a very early age. Teenagers now a days are no more dependable on their parents for their life decisions. They have this clear idea to pursue the things which make them happy first. They are making bold life decisions and are following their path.
For example, Youtube is a growing platform for this generation to show their talent to the world. And many people have been successful and started making a living out of it. It would be wrong to say that those who follow their dreams are more likely to face disappointment.
Infact everyone is equally likely to face disappointment in some phase of their life or other. Some are not happy with their job, Some are still in dilemma in what to do in life. While some has absolutely no purpose in life. By looking at it closely, people who are actually pursuing their dreams are comparatively the satisfied one.
But this doesn't mean that their decision would be right all the time. Most of the people are too young to decide what is right and what is wrong for them. They consider a popular personality as their inspiration and aspire to be like them. But they do not know the actual story behind all this success, all the hardwork that is required, dedication, perseverance and much more. And by the time they realize that it's not a cake walk, it's already too late and they are shattered into pieces.
For example-We often come across the news where a small inconvenience causes children to take a big step like suicide. These are all consequence of what has been discussed above. Not enough guidance, support and awareness may lead to a number of mishaps like that.
Their dreams can be considered absolutely selfish because all they see is themselves and they consider them self responsible for everything that has happened and end up punishing themselves.
So there's no doubt that children should be encouraged in every step to do what actually make them happy and not be burdened by the expectations of their parents and be forced to do what they are not interested in just for the sake of doing it because ultimately it boils down to one thing, which is whether you are satisfied with it or not. But before deciding anything, a proper guidance is absolutely necessary to pick up goals which are actually worthy. A lot of things apart from interest has to be taken into consideration before pursuing a goal. Every step has to be planned beforehand so the we face minimal problem in our journey and don't regret our decision when it's too late. We can't keep our future at stake.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , traditions
...ople. To question the norms, conventions,traditions, rituals that are not in humanitys favo...
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Line 2, column 156, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...he world at a very early age. Teenagers now a days are no more dependable on their parents...
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Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...orld at a very early age. Teenagers now a days are no more dependable on their parents...
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Line 4, column 179, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...still in dilemma in what to do in life. While some has absolutely no purpose in life....
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Line 6, column 10, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ratively the satisfied one. But this doesnt mean that their decision would be right...
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Line 10, column 4, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
... and end up punishing themselves. So theres no doubt that children should be encour...
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Line 10, column 393, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessary'.
Suggestion: necessary
...deciding anything, a proper guidance is absolutely necessary to pick up goals which are actually wor...
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Line 10, column 596, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'we'?
Suggestion: the; we
...ry step has to be planned beforehand so the we face minimal problem in our journey and...
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Line 10, column 643, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...face minimal problem in our journey and dont regret our decision when its too late. ...
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Line 10, column 690, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...gret our decision when its too late. We cant keep our future at stake.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, look, may, so, still, while, apart from, as to, for example, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.5258426966 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 33.0505617978 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2405.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70645792564 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70925323269 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502935420744 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.7279745088 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8928571429 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.39285714286 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0877731487473 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0245406999778 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0295648962468 0.0758088955206 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0434129115639 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278879204473 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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