Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support
they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved andgenerated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The claim that governments should allocate more budgets to their major cities because cultural traditions will be generated and preserved in these cities is not logical. Usually as a general principle governments have to look at all cities with the same eye and avoid any discriminating policy to keep the equilibrium in the country. Personally, I think cultural values will be preserved by people not cities so the governments should provide opportunities for every individual to grow well and consequently help the culture by appropriate behavior. Moreover, investing on peaceful activities with the aim of enhancing international amity can promote cultural values and help the preserving customs or norms.
Firstly, If a government spends all the money for its major cities in the hope of developing cultural values, then this is a corrupt administration that neglects small cities. This policy would gradually destroy all of moral and ethical principles even those cultural values will be diminished because people feel indiscrimination and stop respect to values. For example, Iranian government always boasts about reach cultural values upon which Iranian society has been built and exhibits these values pays huge prices to major cities municipalities such as Tehran, Isfahahan or Tabriz. However, when tourists or statesman visit small cities or remote regions in Iran, they encounter the dark side of that exhibition which consisted of poverty, illiteracy and low standards of living. They soon become aware the fake show offs of the government and the policy makers cannot reach their goals. Therefore, the government has to provide a wide coverage which acts like an umbrella to preserve cultural values in the whole country.
Besides spending money, the governments need to pay attention to promotional activities to enhance cultural values of their country. In this case, the policy makers have to establish effective peaceful relationship with other countries and try to advertise their cultural values through different channels of another country. Japan government’s efforts to distribute its cultural values to other countries of the world is a nice example to illuminate this concept. One of their promotional activities was inviting job applicants from other Asian countries to work in Japan which was based on a suitable paying system that could attract many young people to go there. By doing this, Japan government successfully injected Japanese cultural values to their guests so when prior workers and currently masters came back to their homelands they subconsciously began utilizing those values in the daily life. Thus, a wise government has to work on building effective peaceful relationship with other countries to promote its cultural values by investing on promotional campaigns.
In summary, The governments defiantly can help preserving and generating cultural values but they need to focus on not only major cities but also small cities that can play a crucial role to the culture. Other thing that helps governments reach their goals in terms of culture is investing on establishing friendly relationship with other countries to promote cultural values.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 48, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to preserve' or 'preserve'.
Suggestion: to preserve; preserve
...ary, The governments defiantly can help preserving and generating cultural values but they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, i think, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2712.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48987854251 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9091400119 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512145748988 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 842.4 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1092467782 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 150.666666667 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4444444444 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 5.21951772744 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233285930005 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909238753606 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616293157972 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171587347486 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0430896508177 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.1392134831 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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