Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support
they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved andgenerated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
In the claim, the speaker asserts that government must assure that their major cities receive the financial support they need for their prosperity. however, in my opinion, the claim is irrefutable in several aspects whereas the reasons used for bolster the claim is tenuous.
The reason is biased because it means that other minor cities do not conserve and produce invaluable cultural traditions. there is no deny that the most invaluable architectures such as The great Wall, The Forbidden city are located in the major city of China, Beijing. however, Chengdu is probably unfamiliar to many foreigners but has an extensive amount of historical buildings scattered all over the city and it is a place where people can experience a myriad of traditional foods that worth world-wide attention. In my point of view, it is unjustifiable to ignore that minor cities also have an irreplaceable role in persevering and generating cultural traditions. Thus, government should also provide funds to support the development of those minor cities.
it is absolutely true that major cities are important and worth more attention from the government. there are a number of reasons for it. first of all, a majority of a country’">country’s population is living in the major cities, which results in a glut demand and a scarce supply of jobs also drive up the price for various living necessities; countless people are facing problems such as unemployment, unaffordable rent and so on. Therefore, government should definitely provide a sufficient amount of subsidy to further stimulate the economy in those major cities, and create more job opportunities for people, allow them to have the basic ability to take care of their living. Secondly, major cities serve as the representatives of a country. No matter for presidents, important politicians or famous artists from other countries, when they are visiting a country, their first destination will always be one of the major cities in that country. The main reason is that those cities can potently demonstrate how well this country is developing. Since first impression is important for future corporations between countries in various fields such as politics, art, music, providing support for the development of major cities should be one of government’s primary responsibilities.
In sum, the prosperity of the major cities of a country should be ensured by the government. Not only because those prominent cities are preserving and creating a significant amount cultural traditions, but also due to the fact that the failure and success of those cities associated with the well-being of a great portion of the population and they are reflections of a country’">country’s development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46543778802 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.59794010099 2.79657885939 129% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513824884793 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.8443322805 60.3974514979 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.529411765 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5294117647 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25691187489 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096023732359 0.0831039109588 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626580218078 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174752855753 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523161526551 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.8420337079 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 100.480337079 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.