Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive. Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Through scrutiny on this claim and the reason, I do admit the important role that a major city plays in the cultural traditions and the necessity offering financial support to the major cities. However, the reason give is not that persuasive since the claimer neglects the declining trend of its cultural meaning and the villages’ and counties’ significance of maintaining the nation’s tradition.
Undoubtedly, it should be acknowledged that major cities do carry a lot the nation’s cultural traditions. The truth is that many cities came in to formation even earlier than the country. For example, Athens was formed earlier than Greek and the Roman earlier than Italy. In such a long history the major cities rendered a profound impact on the generation of the culture. You could found how important the Gothic style is for Russian when you have a walk on the road in Moscow. You might also be shocked by the freedom and love in the French culture if you are traveling in Paris. The historical buildings, statues and palaces could be pretty representative for the nation’s culture.
However, it should be made clear that although the major cities represent part of the nation’s cultural traditions, this function is declining increasingly.
Actually, the styles of the major cities, no matter which country, which culture they are from, tend to convergent. Skyscrapers, broad roads and the white collars with suits in hustle and bustle form the common landscape in New York City, Beijing and London. To achieve higher efficiency, the city is constructed in the most facilitating manner, and to some extent, the traditional marks such as dialects and old-fashioned clothes are gradually replaced by the same kind of pronunciation and the similar uniforms.
On the contrary, the villages and counties are still well maintaining the traditional things. For instance, in most villages in China, the girls are asked to learn cooking and knitting before becoming an adult, while the boys are required to till the land and do heavy jobs. This labor pattern reflects sharply the conventional attitude towards the social responsibility of males and females, that is, the males endeavor for a rich life and the females care for the family. In the cities, although such thing can be seen in the prevailing requirement that males should earn more than females, the cultural meaning is not that obvious as the example in the villages.
Surely, cities must receive enough financial support because they have to develop and the residents want a better life. But the necessity seems not lie directly in their cultural function. The villages and the counties might have more profound meanings of the nation’s cultural tradition, which should be given attention equally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'play'?
Suggestion: play
...it the important role that a major city plays in the cultural traditions and the nece...
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Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to cook'.
Suggestion: to cook
... in China, the girls are asked to learn cooking and knitting before becoming an adult, ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'well', 'while', 'as for', 'for example', 'for instance', 'kind of', 'such as', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257197696737 0.240241500013 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.122840690979 0.157235817809 78% => OK
Adjectives: 0.117082533589 0.0880659088768 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0383877159309 0.0497285424764 77% => OK
Pronouns: 0.021113243762 0.0444667217837 47% => OK
Prepositions: 0.1113243762 0.12292977631 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0326295585413 0.0406280797675 80% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87449420782 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0153550863724 0.030933414821 50% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.132437619962 0.0997080785238 133% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0191938579655 0.0249443105267 77% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00959692898273 0.0148568991511 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2800.0 2732.02544248 102% => OK
No of words: 449.0 452.878318584 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.23608017817 6.0361032391 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.58838876751 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.380846325167 0.366273622748 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.314031180401 0.280924506359 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.218262806236 0.200843997647 109% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.126948775056 0.132149295362 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87449420782 2.79330140395 103% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 219.290929204 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536748329621 0.48968727796 110% => OK
Word variations: 62.9433460451 55.4138127331 114% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.45 23.380412469 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5876467134 59.4972553346 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.0 141.124799967 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.45 23.380412469 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.674092028746 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 53.8531180401 51.4728631049 105% => OK
Elegance: 2.2 1.64882698954 133% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402759080099 0.391690518653 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.132388508989 0.123202303941 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0795004246617 0.077325440228 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.635963555367 0.547984918172 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151321575914 0.149214159877 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.182020672475 0.161403998019 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766018081438 0.0892212321368 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.425375996522 0.385218514788 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.13954112214 0.0692045440612 202% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285372844989 0.275328986314 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0375122722394 0.0653680567796 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.30420353982 38% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88274336283 164% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.70907079646 221% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.5995575221 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.