Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated
The government decided to give financial support to cities on bases of cultural traditions preservative is not correct as there should much more reason and not just cities, small town are also culturally rich and the government should focus on Omni model.
Financial support should be given by considering the rural area as well, because as this is the era of globalization cities are blend of culture and due to rapid growth in economy new jobs are taking old one. People nowadays forgotting old culture in cities. But this is not a problem in towns, where old jobs still exists and that effect the culture of region. Why I am dicussing jobs because in old days most of the festivals depends on what kind of job you are doing. Let me give one example: In India farmming is oldest job and most of traditions are related to the farmming. But nowadays in cities no one do farmming and that's why no one celebrate old festivals in cities. That's why i think cities are not one who preserved old culture and financial support should be given on omni model not on selective bases.
Major cities are expanded rapidaly and in that growth we actually ruined all architecture but that was not case with small town, where economic development is not much compared to cities. By giving financial support to town we can preserve old traditional architecture. Though there are many wonderfull architecture bulding in city as well, so distrubuting support would make overall effect.
In conclusion: Financial support should given on omni based model rather than focusing just on the cities It will effect by both means that means not just by cultural preservation but also by financial.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, so, still, well, i think, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1393.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 287.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85365853659 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62913170525 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508710801394 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7728088112 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.083333333 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9166666667 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.75 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144176654017 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.057089975138 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490808350888 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106389190556 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361023895276 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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