Claim: Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Reason: It is inappropriate — and, perhaps, even cruel — to use public resources to fund the arts when people's basic needs are not being met.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The statement contends that the government should tighten their funding for aesthetic while their citizens' basic needs are not fulfill. And I partially agree with the statement. The basic needs is important for people, however, the importance of art should not be ignored.
First of all, the government duty is to give citizens a better life and people should get what they need in daily life. How could a nation maintain its value if their citizens are searching for food everyday? And while people struggling for their life continuously, how could they be calm and follow the regulation of their country? To elaborate, the British research demonstrates that the unemployment rate of an area directly lead to the numbers of criminals. How could a nation provide their children with a insecure environment? A country should care about the basic necessity for human being.
Nevertheless, the funding in arts can solve the issue of unemployment rate surely. A national museum or gallery can improve the impression of the nation, and attract tourists to appreciate the paintings or collections. The construction of museum can bring value out of the boundary in art industry. We may need workers for constructing buildings, waiters serving in coffee shop inside the gallery, guides for introducing the masterpiece and artists for creating design. The industries of architectural, service and art can be beneficial from the government's funding in art.
The statement emphasized on the importance of the basic needs of citizens. However, the advantage of developing art industry should not be underestimated because the poverty can be solved in different approach. That is the reason why I only agree half of the claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'fulfilled'.
Suggestion: fulfilled
...hile their citizens basic needs are not fulfill. And I partially agree with the stateme...
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Line 4, column 200, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...f their citizens are searching for food everyday? And while people struggling for their ...
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Line 4, column 510, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ld a nation provide their children with a insecure environment? A country should ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 276.0 442.535393258 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26449275362 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95131993013 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 215.323595506 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547101449275 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.015465646 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.4705882353 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2352941176 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64705882353 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337477891913 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102359445296 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645082611889 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198325945125 0.150359130593 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523127476415 0.0667264976115 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.