Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Reason: The surest indicator of a great nation is actually the welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
There are a lot of aspects that could be used as an indicator to tell if a country is great or not. However, they also raise a heated discussion about what is the best indicator of the greatness of a country. It this statement, the author claims that the welfare of the people is the most import factor that decides the nation’s greatness, comparing to the achievements of its rulers, artists or scientists. Though there are some merits in this claim, I would argue that all those factors contribute to the greatness of a country, and it would be oversimplified and biased to claim that any one of them is superior to the rest.
First of all, I have to admit that the welfare of the people does play an important role in determining the greatness of a country. The most rudimentary function of a country is to unite its people to work toward a common goal and in turn benefiting every of its members. Taking this into consideration, it would be ridiculous to promote arts, science or the government if numerous people are in the state of hunger or unemployment. With this in mind, if a country is to be called a “great” one, the government have to put the well-being of its citizens at the very top of its agenda.
That being said, it is also undeniable that science, arts and the efficiency of the government are also important factors in determining whether a country would be considered great. For instance, if a country possesses abundant amounts of resources to meet its citizens’ needs, but there is basically no science nor arts developed in this country, we would probably call this kind of society a “primitive society” instead of a developed “great” one. Thus, if we rule out every other factor that may be taken into consideration about a nation’s greatness but keep the welfare of the people only, it might turn out to be an absurd situation that no one would actually consider this country “great”.
With those two aspects being considered separately, I have to point out that the welfare of a nation’s people, as well as the achievements of artists, scientists and the rulers, is not necessarily mutual exclusive. Quite the contrary, they are actually tightly connected with each other. For example, we in most cases consider health care as an important part of social welfare in modern society. Nevertheless, if the status of science, especially biology and chemistry are underdeveloped, how can we provide people adequate solutions to fight against diseases? Likewise, it is also not possible to provide people a satisfactory spiritual life without the presence of arts. Nor can we maintain the order of the society if the government is corrupted and the ruler is ignorant. Thus, all those factors are critical in providing people a proper welfare and further determining the greatness of a nation.
To put it together, though the welfare of the people is a very import factor that decides a nation’s greatness, I also maintain that the achievements in the field of science, art and governing, are also tightly related to people’s welfare and plays an important role in determining the greatness of a country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, likewise, may, nevertheless, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, kind of, as well as, first of all, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2673.0 2235.4752809 120% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97765363128 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14347304115 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42644320298 0.4932671777 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 845.1 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.4575890155 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.684210526 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2631578947 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47368421053 5.21951772744 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206743766496 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754510426296 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580626513327 0.0758088955206 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138388791616 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610567119142 0.0667264976115 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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