Claim: The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Reason: The surest indicator of a great nation is actually the welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the
reason on which that claim is based.
Some people argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is not determined by its elite groups. This may sound true to some adherents who believe that the welfare of all its people is the most reflective indicator for a great nation. However, this essay will insist that both approaches are essential for a great nation.
Admittedly, merely great acheivement of few elites, from our historical perspective, did not completely prove the quality of a great nation. For one, when we think of Mahatma Ghandi, even though he stood as a symbol of non-violent resistance, India is still suffering from gender inequality and class hierarchy. This case alone proves that even the most famous leader is regarded as the symbol of peace, that does not represent the democratic atmosphere and even reflects the opposite. Thus, the reason that the welfare of its all people may convince us rather than the fact that few elites demonstrate a nation's quality.
However, sometimes the achievement of few elites does contribute in raising its nation's reputation. Considering many inventions and cultural heritages that historical figures made, few can yield better images to its nation and change the quality of life. For instance, Thomas Edison, who popularized the electricity to overall U.S., can be regarded as a frontier in making a great nation for the U.S.A. Even though this invention was initiated by individual, it had significant effect on the human history. Also, when we remind of Wolfgang Amadeus Mozart, the greatest composer of Austria, even though the Austria does not have affluent cultural heritages except Mozart, Austria is known as the hometome of great musician and attracts a plethora of tourists. These facts tell us that even though some achievements can be confined to few individuals, the nation and its people may get advantages and consequently proceed to become a better nation.
To sum, even though the indicator of a great nation seems to fulfill the welfare of all its people, but sometimes achievement of few elites would yield a better images for a nation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 831, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...hough some achievements can be confined to few individuals, the nation and its peo...
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Line 7, column 183, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld yield a better images for a nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, may, so, still, thus, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 342.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1081871345 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72264304132 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 215.323595506 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511695906433 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8985953959 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.384615385 118.986275619 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3076923077 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.21951772744 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294473664662 0.243740707755 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130928771439 0.0831039109588 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100419257757 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2270425647 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0885909750154 0.0667264976115 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.