The author claims that Company management should monitor all employee e-mail correspondence by claiming that such monitoring will reduce the resources like time and Capacity of the system. Even though it is true, this is a debatable topic there are both sides of positives and negatives. I partly agree with the author's claim for the following pieces of evidence.
Firstly, Nowadays Technology is growing rapidly, new software is built and previous software is updating. After Automation came into existence everything is made easy now. Half of the human work is done by the machine itself. Technology is increased in security purposes also like antiviruses that protect the machine. Client data is very important for the company if it gets hacked company loses belief and may project be loosed and even, the company's reputation too. So, employees should be aware of data breaching. We get a daily lot of e-mails every e-mail should carefully scrutinize in-order to identify which is fallacy emails. So, instead, Company management while using existing technologies to automatically monitor the all-employee e-mail there will be reduced in both time and system capacity, as well as protection from lawsuits.
However, for example, take a company like Accenture private limited. It is an international company and totals it exist in 20 countries and there are rough 10lakhs employees with approximately 40,000 clients handling. every client's project has certain boundaries some projects are restricted and some projects are open. Some client's project has certain significant sensitive data, except employee's of that project no one should explore data. In those cases, company management doesn't have the right to monitor the all-employee e-mail correspondence.
In conclusion, even though conducting monitoring of all employee e-mail correspondence leads to reduce in wasteful resources and protecting the company from lawsuits it is restricted to the project. Some clients won't agree to evaluate their emails due to fear of data breaching issue. So, I partly agree with the author's claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 324.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47222222222 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85538201423 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58024691358 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2688110103 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3157894737 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0526315789 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382556332855 0.243740707755 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103693907112 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146881328588 0.0758088955206 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231929202597 0.150359130593 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536987360704 0.0667264976115 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 12.1639044944 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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