A company should identify those employees who excel at entry level positions and place an emphasis on their training and professional development will increase employees' personal fulfillment and enable them to serve the company to the best of their ability. Otherwise, their potential is likely to remain undeveloped.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the recommendation above and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the recommendations and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Annually, thousands of students are graduating from universities. While they were taught in the academic enviroment, the gap between the job market requirments and knolewdge learned on the universities has been always a concern. A group of people who are the human resource managers believes that private sectors should hire talented entry-level individuals and assist them to increase their knowledge. By doing so, they will increase the motivation and fulfillment of employees. I am totally agree with this recommendation.
First, incrasing the knowledge a firm's employee would ecoourage them that they are important for the company and also they are part of the whole. Furthermore, training the employee would provide them sense of fidelity to the company resulting in more motivations in employee which helps them to have a long-term plan their career. On the account of such training, If a competitor propose them a job opportunity with a higher wage than their current job, they would not accept it.
Second, although trainig entry-level employees puts a sheer scale of expenses on the shoulder of the firm, it will compensate the expenses in the long-term. Employing an expert is quite expensive and needed to allocate a considerable part of budget to find one in the labor market. By trainig entry-level empolyees to enhance the required skills, the entreprises cut their future cose by investing on the current employees
In conclusion, I believe that
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... current job, they would not accept it. Second, although trainig entry-level emp...
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...se by investing on the current employees In conclusion, I believe that
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1237.0 2235.4752809 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 233.0 442.535393258 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30901287554 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90696013833 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97669730586 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62660944206 0.4932671777 127% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 704.065955056 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2522726714 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.454545455 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1818181818 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63636363636 5.21951772744 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2725363166 0.243740707755 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0862102773934 0.0831039109588 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737567817002 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123466215522 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755188098075 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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