Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples
Nowadays, there are two different points of view in the education system. a group of people believes that students should not spend too much time to become graduate in the university and the earlier they enter the job market, the more advantages are available to them. However, detractors of this idea believe that people should prepare themselves for majors that require years of studying. I adamantly agree with this idea that people should graduate as soon as possible. I firmly this way because of two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, No matter how much students are taught, it is not comparable to what they are going to learn in the profession. Universities can teach just fundamental concepts of a major and most of their concentration are on preparing students for a higher level of educations. It should be stressed that private companies are aware of this pitfall and allocate sheer scales of investment to training employees. As a personal example, I start my career in the digital marketing as an apprentice for six months. Even though my knowledge was weak, I took minimum wage.
secondly, the earlier someone enters the labor market, with the faster pace he/she can prosper in his/her career. Various companies have a hierarchy system of employment which means that new employees will be assigned to the lower level of status and after years of gaining experience they will promote to a manager position in the company. Accordingly, initiating a job sooner would help them to climb the steps of success faster. Furthermore, people with more work experience have more connections. Nowadays, in this competitive world which everybody tries to maximize his self-utilization, it is crucial to have reliable connections. As a matter of fact, these networks of people help an employee to secure his future and get his out of a predicament. For example, if someone was fired from his job, these people would be a considerable relief because they will do a favor and recommend him to other companies
In a nutshell, I believe that my friend should embrace the opportunity of studying less in the university and embarks on his full-time world quickly. I feel this way because he can foster in his major faster and he can learn more during accomplishing different tasks
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i feel, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1937.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99226804124 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81778599219 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54381443299 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6381699453 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.611111111 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5555555556 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107472762468 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313283932987 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345783027814 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0662306074769 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0269400326107 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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