Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, children are precious not only for their family but also for the whole country. These young-aged people are an investment for the future of any nation. Subsequently, considerable worries spread out around the world about whether children should play computer games or not. As a result of these worries, parents prohibit children from playing computer games. Even some governments, introduce different laws that don’t allow the game companies to release some type of games same as an action for children. Various points of view which are germane to the point matter being discussed bring us to the moot question as to whether children should spend their time to play games or not. Some people and specificity parents have disposition toward the notion that playing computer games makes social abilities of the children weaken. Yet the popular sentiment to which I vehemently cling is that parents should let their sons and daughters to play computer games. The underlying aim of this essay is to put forward some cogent reasons to shed light on a number of issues in this framework
The first fiscal point that prompt me to hold this idea is that computer games help children to gain new knowledge. Various types of the games are available in the market that young-aged people can use them to get new information in far-reaching areas same as history or even mathematics. As a personal experience, I remember when I was 8 or 9 years old, I started to play an adventures game called Dragon. In this game, I should find different objects and place them in the specific area to pass the mission. The game was in English, and when I reach an object, name of it, was displayed on the screen. As a result of this action, I broadened my English vocabulary. Even at the age of 25, I can remember most of them. Besides, another significant factor is that computer games empower creativity of children. In fact children, by playing video games, put themselves in the challenging situation and to overcome the challenges, children should utilize innovative manners.
Another equally silent point in corroborating my stance on this subject is that extreme limitations make many psychological problems in the future of the children. As a one who studied psychology at the university, it is worthy to mention that, these kinds of inhibition that could manage effectively in alternative ways, can lead them to depression. One of the studies I recently read, examined this idea. The researchers conducted an interview with people who their age was more than 20 and also they faced this kind of limitation when they were children. The data denoted that a host of them experience depression more than ones that were free to do whatever they wanted.
It can be de deduced from a combination of breadth of coverage and depth of detail that children should be allowed to play computer games. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: firstly gaining new knowledge; secondly, one of the caused of some psychological problems in the children is a limitation that they faced when they were young.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 631, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...discussed bring us to the moot question as to whether children should spend their time to pla...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 1100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... on a number of issues in this framework The first fiscal point that prompt me to...
^^^^
Line 2, column 973, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dren should utilize innovative manners. Another equally silent point in corrobor...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, as to, even so, in fact, kind of, as a result, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 527.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92599620493 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74551351217 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510436432638 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8712230539 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.166666667 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9583333333 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04166666667 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272408675812 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080171160847 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653345181855 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162139837313 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732374358103 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.