Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed
Students should have complete right to choose which career path they want based on their interests and passion. If a particular career is unlikely to succeed then it should be up to student that what he or she has to do with it. If he or she is completely passionate and interested about the career that they have chosen then there is no way stopping him or her from succeeding.
Let’s say a field of study which is tough to succeed like, paleontology. A student who is interested in dinosaurs and wants to study them would choose to pursue their career in paleontology. But, paleontology is tough career to grow in. The student has to go through the archaic data and thesis. If the student is really passionate then he or she succeed in this field by giving a thesis on dinosaurs or let the public know what dinosaurs on how exactly dinosaurs lived. Or a student who is interested in art or acting which is not a relatively easy field to succeed, will be succeeded when they do the hard work and focus on their career properly. If these students who are interested in a field which is unlikely to succeed are dissuaded and forced to choose some other field which would be easier to succeed will be helpful to the students and there would be a high chance that they might not succeed.
There are some positive points by guiding the student to take the right career path. Educational institutions can shape the student’s path by guiding them which is the better way to succeed in life. If the student is performing not that well in the field which is unlikely to succeed then the institution can educate the students to take the right path.
Educational institution’s job is to shape the student in his or her best form and show a clear path to the student’s interests and passion. Students are ones who decide which path to choose based on their passion and interests and institution should guide them accordingly. Therefore, I disagree that educational institutions should dissuade the students from pursuing the fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 353, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...ent is really passionate then he or she succeed in this field by giving a thesis on din...
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Line 5, column 205, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...h is the better way to succeed in life. If the student is performing not that well...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, really, so, then, therefore, well, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 366.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73770491803 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77229654198 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 215.323595506 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.398907103825 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8771929342 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.375 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472536486094 0.243740707755 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18412707095 0.0831039109588 222% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.162629505219 0.0758088955206 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313100043755 0.150359130593 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879207899898 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 100.480337079 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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