Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
In our current modern world, there are two types of views toward the value and the role that educational institutions should play. Therefore, the statement can both be valid and invalid depending on which type of perspective that people position the educational institutions that I will discuss further as following.
First type of view is that the most critical value of educational institutions is to help students to become their true self, that means to lead the students to know themselves better is more important than position them in a successful field. For example, this value is generally a mainstream for most of the social science majors that have a tradition of liberal art, and emphasize the importance of pursuing knowledge and wisdom even though they don’t have an immediate and practical value. Hence, it is difficult to state whether a student will be successful or not in the future if the educational institutions take this liberal art’s approach. Because the ultimate standard of being successful is to find the real and inner self of a person, while the success in ordinary life is not the critical measurement. Following this context, then I would argue that the educational institutions are free from the responsibility because there is no field that a student can fail in unless the student choses a field that doesn’t fit his or her own real interests.
However, there is another perspective that positions educational institutions in a totally divergent direction. This other view treasures educational institutions’ value in how effective they can train students to possess the practical skill and gain the most advantage from a wealthy and powerful life based on the training that they have acquired from the educational institutions. Consequently, the success in ordinary life is critical toward the educational institutions, which hold this view. For instance, business majors generally have this preference and do see their students’ success in large enterprise as a major measurement of the effectiveness of their courses. Furthermore, by following this approach, it is common there is a more standard and obvious way to assess the success, such as the salary earned or the company titles. Therefore, I would state that the educational institutions that follow this approach, they should assist students to pursue the success that has been agreed, and it leads to the conclusion that the educational institutions should perform the responsibility and persuade the students to only devote themselves in the field that is more likely to succeed.
In conclusion, there is no ultimate right or wrong of the statement and different assumptions of the values that the educational institutions should play will lead to divergent results of the responsibility they should carry. While liberal art’s type of educational institutions may be free from the responsibility, the educational institutions with a practical-leading approach should perform the responsibility and lead students to a more easily succeeding fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2581.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3659043659 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16402670012 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453222453222 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0359550562 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.744420609 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 172.066666667 118.986275619 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0666666667 23.4991977007 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.06666666667 5.21951772744 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241716292093 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889721106815 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569854402607 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160719658398 0.150359130593 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298897919458 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.1392134831 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.54 48.8420337079 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 12.1743820225 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.46 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.2143820225 132% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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